Rate my essay please ( i wrote it here with its spelling mistakes , its a practice essay )

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Do we value only what we struggle for ?
Farther from doubt and ambivilance , the statement " we value only what we struggle for " is extra ordinary accurate . As some of us work a little harder their gains are a little better . It will never be easy or perfect. The biography of thomas edison and the novel “Animal Farm” by george orwell are bare evidence that we value only what we struggle for .
Thomas Edison , the ambitious inventor , was a hard working person. He didnt want to leave anything neither undone nor unperfect . Thomas struggled to create the lightning bulb . He failed more than one thousand times to create this long living lightning bulb .at last he succeeded to invent one that lives for 3 months.
Additionaly , the Animals in the " Animal Farm " novel prove that we value only what we struggle for . Before they succeeded in the rebellion , they were living with their land master . Not working very hard hard and getting their food without doing effort , the animals were not living happy .after the rebellion wasdone , the animals were working very hard every day to get their food , seed the land , and clean the farm . They were doing alot of effor but they were extremly happy and living freely .
Last but not least , the biography of Thomas Edison and the novel " Animal Farm " make it crystal clear that we value only what we struggle for …

Score my essay please !!!

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No spaces immediately before punctuation marks. And yes, the spelling and poor grammar make it more difficult to read, so I suggest working on that.

An example from a fictional Orwellian novel about a fictional society about animals doesn’t “prove” your claim. I’d use different wording.

It might be just me, but the conclusion doesn’t make sense. “Last but not least” is usually used when introducing the last item in a list (what are you adding?).

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Also, this seems to be the case with many SAT prompts, but I would consider trying to argue the other side of the argument, regardless of what your actual opinion may be. I can think of at least one thing that we (or at least most of us) value but don’t really struggle for.

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Thanks @MITer94 !! But how can i start the conclusion and w i should say in it