<p>Well, I can see that, but essentially I tried to focus my essay on generally making the world a better place and cooperating with others. I didn’t mention anything illicit whatsoever, and the shade thing was the fact that these were like a group of strangers who wouldn’t have cared about one another in most situations but because the climate was so extremely hot we spent hours working together on that thing. i didn’t imply that there was a party atmosphere at all. i’m not an idiot, that’s the last thing anyone would write in a college essay, even as a joke.</p>
<p>and while i may have heard this song 13 years ago, the essay followed how as i grew up, my interpretation of that song grew up too- from something nice to listen to to something that i deeply interpreted and became really inspired from. i picked the cultural awareness prompt, so i basically had to write about my view of the world and how i interact in it and i thought that i really managed to do that creaatively and effectively!</p>
<p>not to be rude, but to be honest, i would think that writing about an activity and the standard “i used to not care but now i give a crap” story would’ve been so played out! obviously, i was wrong. i also don’t believe that that could show much personality. one of my best friends wrote an essay like that, about an activity and how it actually made him care, but i got NONE of him from that essay like, i don’t even know.</p>
<p>i thought my diversity essay was fresh and exciting as well, i wrote about being mixed race and some of the strange trials and tribulations that come along with that.</p>
<p>and i’m sorry if i’ve sounded mean at all, but i used a version of my beatles/concert/laser show essay for EVERY SINGLE SCHOOL I APPLIED TO. that’s ten schools. i thought it was a really well written essay, as did many others, but here you are, saying that virtually everything about it was all wrong, and that the essay is why i didn’t get in.</p>
<p>which means that i probably won’t get in anywhere.
and that’s awesome to hear.</p>
<p>you may be right though, and i may just have been an idealistic idiot, but while i’ll entertain most of your points, i refuse to believe that i could’ve found an example that better expressed my personality, especially given that i wrote about the two most pivotal moments of my life. i wrote about the most representative experiences of myself that i could’ve written about. if anything, i probably shouldn’t have been so honest and maybe written about how i was on yearbook staff or something and played it up like i didn’t despise that semester of hell, because it was a “really important experience that taught me to work harder and be proud that i had made an important contribution to my school” yeah, f that.</p>