Hi! Would anyone be okay with reading my supplemental essay to Cornell CAS? DM me 
I’d be glad to!
I would not share it with current students who are applying right now. There are some parents on here (long time posters) you may want to PM.
I would only share your essay with adults who have a very xlong posting history.
I am a mom of three- 2 college (BU, Dartmouth) and 1 grad school. Happy to give it a look.
Asking for feedback is fine, but after going through this process with my kids, and reading way too many essays to count, and having multiple people read the essays as well, unless you’re having someone read it to proof for grammar or general feedback, you shouldn’t consider anyone who doesn’t have some sort of college admissions background or college counseling background to know if your essays are on the right track. A parent doesn’t really know what a college is looking for. Even a high school teacher doesn’t know what they’re looking for. So, while they can help in terms of the grammar like I said and cleaning it up, what they may think is a good essay, may in fact not be what the school is looking for.
My D went on a service trip this past summer and had a great experience and someone encouraged her to write about that experience. Someone familiar with the process told her that is one of the worst topics to write about. That unless she basically founded a charity or the service project, that topic is so overdone, the colleges don’t want to see that. So, again unless you can truly make the topic your own and unique, what we as parents or educated professionals may think is a great topic, may actually be something the universities view as weak or a poor choice.
Oh and just to add one other part to this story. My D who was accepted ED to Cornell asked me to read her supplemental essay and I did not like it. I didn’t think it read well at all. There were parts of it that I didn’t like and didn’t seem to make sense. My Ivy League/University of Chicago Law School graduate felt the same. Clearly, our lack of familiarity with what the College of Engineering was looking for and our lack of understanding perhaps of engineering and some of the terms, may have made the difference.
I believer her father, a physician also had some issues with the essay. So, it goes to show, little did we know and I’m glad she didn’t listen to us and instead listened to the people who did know what they and she was talking about!!
Good luck!