<p>I'd pm it to you, but would anyone care to read it and tell me if I adequately described a unique interest? Thanks</p>
<p>just read it when you posted it on here and it was pretty good</p>
<p>Thanks. I’m just hoping that it doesn’t fulfill that “insert university here” trap. And yeah, I yanked it off after seeing what you posted on that other Why Duke thread. Paranoid lol</p>
<p>Yea sure I’ll read it for you, PM it to me.</p>
<p>Sure! PM it to me.</p>
<p>I’ll take a look, pm it!</p>
<p>Yeah PM it to me!!</p>
<p>Its too long to PM apparently. So I’ll just post it up here for a little bit:</p>
<p>I could write about how I feel Duke is the best fit for me because
of its strong academics, or I could write about how I want to be a part of such a prestigious educational legacy. I could write about a lot of things, but there are few things that honestly paint the picture of why I believe that Duke is the only place I can grow. I’ve learned how unique an education at Duke can really be. Other top tier schools seem to assume when it comes to admissions, their historical reputation does the talking. Duke, holds to a principle of progress; no matter how renowned their students and programs become, there is still a sky to strive for. I want to be a part of community that wants to push boundaries and break walls because that is the only way I believe we can achieve success. The most alluring things I’ve heard about Duke is the collaborative nature of its students- especially the Pre-Med students. When you think of Pre-Med students, you picture incredibly tough academics with students trying to edge each other and make themselves seem better to professors. Talking with my former lacrosse teammate and Duke student Scott Spencer (’12), this prototype could not be further from the truth. He described a tight knit group of individuals that want to see each other succeed- with a healthy dose of friendly competition to keep each other on their toes. To see such competitive students working in unison tells me that they are confident in Duke’s ability to prepare them for medical school that they don’t need to cut each other down in order to do well.</p>
<pre><code>During my freshman year in high school, my father suffered a traumatic brain injury from a near fatal car accident. Since the accident, I have taken a great interest in neuroscience after seeing how he struggles to overcome his deficits due to his injury. Duke emphasizes the ability of undergrads to do research in many of Duke’s specialized graduate schools, which led me to the Institute for Brain Sciences- an entire school dedicated to understanding the brain by offering the chance to delve deeper into neurology. I’m so excited to immerse myself in such a unique combination of studies at such a high level. The FOCUS program in Cognitive Science, Geopolitics and Collective memory would allow me to focus my study of biological science while tapping into my personal experience with my father’s injury. With Duke’s Certificates Program I have the chance to continue my interest in broadcasting with a Certificate in Documentary Studies. I will have the ability to continue my achievements on a high level of academic recognition and skill in documentary work while simultaneously pursing a major in neuroscience. I can’t think of a better place to be- it’s just the perfect fit.
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<p>I wouldn’t say that Duke is the only place you can grow because it’s not. There are plenty of other great schools and Duke knows that. You sound like an interesting person who will thrive wherever you go so don’t sell yourself short by saying that you need Duke in order to succeed… I think they’ll catch that. I’d reword that part. Otherwise, not too shabby, pal.</p>
<p>I think you have a very solid essay, and you made it unique to yourself by describing your interest with brain surgery and how your father’s incident contributed to it. There is some stuff in your essay that’s pretty generic (talking about how Duke students are always trying to help each other out or that Duke is always striving to be better). Both of these are very true and awesome traits about Duke and are two reasons why I love Duke so much, but I think they read it a lot (I’ve seen these reasons mentioned quite a few times on these forums). But it seems like they are genuine reasons that you have for wanting to attend Duke, so it fits well with your essay. Good luck!</p>