Readmission letter after academic suspension

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To Whom It May Concern:

My name is ------------------and I was a biomedical science major at the ABC. I am currently on academic suspension, due to that fact that I could not maintain an adequate GPA, and I would like it if I could be readmitted into the science department for chemistry this coming summer. When first arriving at ABC, I expected very little in terms of academic workloads since I went to community college, the professor there were more lenient on academics. So, it did not really occur to me that it would be more difficult at a university. Also, I did not prioritize my school work enough because I was new to ----city and I wanted to socialize and make new friends. Consequently, I did not realize that my GPA was going down.When receiving my grades at the end of that first semester, I made excuses for why I did poorly not yet coming to terms with my accountability. After going through about half of the next semester in the summer, I realized I was on academic probation and in jeopardy of being dismissed. Learning that I was on academic probation, the second semester, I tried to compensate by working a harder. Unfortunately, my poor study habits proved inadequate and it was too late to recover.
After being out of school for two semesters, I am ready to go back to school and focus on my studies. I plan to get better grades by focusing more on studying, I will leave 6 hours each day just for studying. I will go to all the TA’s hours so that I can understand and ask the questions I would not be able to ask in class. I will read my book ahead of class so that I can understand the professors lectures. I will prioritize my education over socializing this time around. So I hope that you can give me an opportunity to continue my education ABC.
I understand that this not guarantee readmission to ABC.

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can someone help with this please, writing is not my strong suit. I would appreciate and feed back.

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Actually, I think it’s a pretty decent succinct and sincere letter, though it needs some grammatical editing. Usually these letters are awful and way too long. Good luck.

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Keep in mind that colleges want people that will be successful.

If I read this letter as is, I would not readmit you because this is not written well. It has grammatical errors.

Also, I would wonder why you felt that University wouldn’t be harder than CC? Why did you go to CC instead of Uni?

I would also wonder why you wanted to go to college if you would rather socialize? What is different now?

Then I would wonder why you didn’t realize your grades wouldn’t be bad if you were not doing well on tests and such during the semester? Why didn’t you change what you were doing then? Why will it be different now?

Second semester you realized that you were not doing well and “tried harder” but it didn’t work. What did you do differently then? What will you do differently now"?

A successful appeal must do several things:

  1. show that you understand what went wrong
  2. show that you take responsibility for the academic failures
  3. show that you have a plan for future academic success
  4. in a broad sense, show that you are being honest with yourself and the committee

Here are some examples:

http://collegeapps.about.com/od/Academic-Dismissals/a/Sample-Appeal-Letter-For-An-Academic-Dismissal.htm

Some of this is general, and some specific to your situation.

  1. search this topic on CC and you will see many other posts on academic appeals
  2. Make sure your letter states what the issue was that caused you to have academic difficulties
  3. Did you talk to your professors/dean of students about the issue?
  4. Did you make use of the many resources your school has? if not, why not?
  5. Find out what those resources are…e.g. counseling center, talking to professors, talking to your adviser, withdrawing from class, talking to dean, maybe taking incompletes,
  6. State how you would use those in the future
  7. How are you addressing what caused the issue?
  8. Think about if you should continue at college, or take a break.
  9. Think about if you should continue at a community college, to be close to your family
  10. How is your college funded? Will that continue?

In general, keep in mind what the college wants…they want students who can succeed. They need to know that you understand what the issue was, know now the resources that you can use, how the problems is resolved so you will not have academic issues in the future.

Also read this for ideas on how to do better: http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/college-life/1920853-college-is-a-step-up-from-hs-16-tips-on-doing-well-in-college.html

To Whom It May Concern:

My name is XX and I was a Biomedical Science major at the ABC. I am currently on academic suspension because I did maintain an adequate GPA. I am writing to request readmission into the Science department for Chemistry this coming summer. When first arriving at ABC, I expected very little in terms of academic workloads because when I went to community college the professor were more lenient on academics.I expected the academic workload to be similar to the Community College. It did not really occur to me that it would be more difficult at a university. Also, I did not prioritize my school work enough because I was new to ----city and I wanted to socialize and make new friends. Consequently, I did not realize that my GPA was going down. When receiving my grades at the end of that first semester, I made excuses for why I did poorly not yet coming to terms with my accountability. After going through about half of the next semester in the summer, I realized I was on academic probation and in jeopardy of being dismissed. Learning that I was on academic probation, the second semester, I tried to compensate by working harder. Unfortunately, my poor study habits proved inadequate and it was too late to recover.

Now at this point you need to convince them you have changed your outlook. How did you do in CC? I assume well as you were accepted. Also, why do you want to major in Chemistry? What career are you interested in?

After being out of school for two semesters, I am ready to go back to school and focus on my studies. I have realized that if I am to reach my goal of [something about your career], I need to have a degree in Chemistry. I love XXX University, and it would mean so much to me to graduate with a degree from this school. If I am reinstated, I will focus much better on my schoolwork, take fewer hours, and manage my time more wisely. For example, I plan to treat school like my full time job and leave 5 hours each day just for studying and homework. I will go to the XXX center and take a study skills class. I will go to all the TA’s and/or Professors’ office hours so that I can understand and ask the questions I was not able to ask in class. I will read my book ahead of class so that I can understand the professor’s lectures. I will take advantage of tutoring when I need it. I will prioritize my education over socializing this time around. Please understand that my low GPA that led to my dismissal does not indicate that I am a bad student. Really, I’m a good student who prioritized poorly. I hope you will give me a second chance. Thank you for considering this appeal.

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Than you for the feed back. I went over it and made some changes as you suggested @booper. Here is the new revised version:

To Whom It May Concern:

My name is -------, and I was majoring in a biomedical science at ABC. I am currently on academic suspension, due to that fact that I could not maintain an adequate GPA, and I am imploring for another opportunity to be readmitted into the science department for chemistry this coming summer of 2017.

When first arriving at ABC the spring semester of 2016, I expected very little in terms of school workloads since I transferred from a community college, where the professors were more lenient on homework and tests. So, the university work overwhelmed me. Moreover, I did not prioritize my school work enough because I was unfamiliar with the Orlando area, and I became distracted with becoming familiar to the area and making new friends. Consequently, I did not realize that my GPA was going down. When receiving my grades at the end of that first semester, I made excuses for why I did poorly, not yet coming to terms with my accountability, which was my first error. After going through about half of the next semester in the summer, I realized I was on academic probation and in jeopardy of being dismissed. Learning that I was on academic probation, the second semester, I tried to compensate by working harder. Unfortunately, my hard work was not enough, and it was too late to recover because I was already half-way through the semester.

After being out of school for two semesters, I am ready to go back to school and focus on my studies. I have realized that if I am to reach my goal becoming a pharmacist, I need to have a degree in chemistry. I love the University of ABC, and it would mean so much to me to graduate with a degree from this school. If I am reinstated, I will focus much better on my schoolwork, take fewer hours, and manage my time more wisely. For example, I plan to treat school like my full time job and leave 5 hours each day just for studying and homework. I will go to the student academic resources center and take a study skills class. I will go to all the TA’s and/or Professors’ office hours so that I can understand and ask the questions I was not able to ask in class. I will read my book ahead of class so that I can understand the professor’s lectures. I will take advantage of tutoring when I need it. I will prioritize my education over socializing this time around. Please understand that my low GPA that led to my dismissal does not indicate that I am a bad student. Really, I’m a good student who prioritized poorly. I hope you will give me a second chance. I understand that this not a guarantee for readmission to ABC, thank you for considering this appeal.

I would appreciate any other feedback on this, thank you

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You still have run on sentences. Here is a link to what they are and how to avoid them:
http://www.englishforeveryone.org/Topics/Run-On-Sentences.htm

You do this many times throughout the essay.

For example: " I understand that this not a guarantee for readmission to ABC, thank you for considering this appeal."

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Thank you, again for letting me know about the run-on sentences. I did change some of them…

To Whom It May Concern:

My name is XXX, and I was majoring in a biomedical science at the University of XXX. I am currently on academic suspension, due to that fact that I could not maintain an adequate GPA. I am imploring for another opportunity to be readmitted into the science department for chemistry this coming summer of 2017.

When first arriving at XXX the spring semester of 2016, I expected very little in terms of school workloads since I transferred from a community college. Where the professors were more lenient on homework and tests. So, the university work overwhelmed me. Moreover, I did not prioritize my school work enough because I was unfamiliar with the Orlando area, and I became distracted with becoming familiar to the area and making new friends. Consequently, I did not realize that my GPA was going down. When receiving my grades at the end of that first semester, I made excuses for why I did poorly. Not yet coming to terms with my accountability, which was my first error. After going through about half of the next semester in the summer, I realized I was on academic probation and in jeopardy of being dismissed. Learning that I was on academic probation, the second semester, I tried to compensate by working harder. Unfortunately, my hard work was not enough, and it was too late to recover because I was already half-way through the semester.

After being out of school for two semesters, I am ready to go back to school and focus on my studies. I have realized that if I am to reach my goal becoming a pharmacist, I need to have a degree in chemistry. I love University of XXX, and it would mean so much to me to graduate with a degree from this school. If I am reinstated, I will focus much better on my schoolwork, take fewer hours, and manage my time more wisely. For example, I plan to treat school like my full time job and leave 5 hours each day just for studying and homework. I will go to the student academic resources center and take a study skills class. I will go to all the TA’s and/or Professors’ office hours so that I can understand and ask the questions I was not able to ask in class. I will read my book ahead of class so that I can understand the professor’s lectures. I will take advantage of tutoring when I need it. I will prioritize my education over socializing this time around. Please understand that my low GPA that led to my dismissal does not indicate that I am a bad student. Really, I’m a good student who prioritized poorly. I hope you will give me a second chance. I understand that this not a guarantee for readmission to XXX. Thank you for considering this appeal.

just let me know how this sound, and if you were reading it would you consider letting back in school again?

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Look at your first sentence. Look at what I proposed.