Really Scared... My Common App Essay Needs Help!

<p>My former English teacher read my Common App essay today and after the first paragraph said she would have rejected me. Can someone please read my essay and give me some suggestions? Thank you!!</p>

<p>I would be happy to take a look for you! Send me an email: <a href="mailto:missmibster@yahoo.com">missmibster@yahoo.com</a></p>