<p>Well, as we all know, UC apps are approaching and I was wondering if someone could look at my response for the second UC prompt:
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>
<pre><code>I slowly hand in my application for what would become my main exposure to philanthropy. It is the middle of my sophomore year as I wait for the head of admissions to file my application and send me off. I wait patiently for the decision of my application and come June, I receive a phone call asking to have my fingerprints recorded. Within the coming months I learn more about humanity and treatment of others more than I had ever thought before; I learn more about what it means to be compassionate, to contribute and help a fellow human being.
Going into the application process, I had little idea as to why I was even there. Was it for the volunteer hours to slap on my college application; was it to actually gain something from a seemingly dreary experience? Even today, Im still not quite sure why I decided to go through and apply, but one thing is sure, it was certainly view-changing. Prior to joining the volunteer program, I was a little aimless, undecided as to what I would end up doing with my life; however, while working at the hospital, I met individuals willing to spend most of their time helping others. After witnessing their dedication firsthand, I confirmed a life quality most important to me, dedication. From the unruly visitors in the intensive care units to the loud children in pediatrics, the staff pushes forward in hope of a better future.
Working in the hospital I see tidbits of peoples lives blink before me as I go to wherever Im assigned. I see patients waiting for their medicine in the pharmacy; I watched as people in dietary hurry and prepare meals; I observed how to perfectly mend a cast and learned the significance of damage to the ulnar and medial nerves; Ive given time and have learned much from my experience. The time Ive spent parallels my nature to tend to spend too much on certain things, both beneficial and harmful. I work for an extended period on a club poster to perfect it, or I may
Now, I continue to work hard and dedicate myself to strive and succeed. Im glad that I can proudly proclaim, I spend my Fridays volunteering!. I know that for whatever little Im able to put in, I have the chance of changing someones life for the better. Even if Im just escorting a patient to have a new cast put in or delivering blood packs for a nurse in an upper wing, Im satisfied with what I can do. As a high school student, the idea that I have ability to work in a hospital still boggles me. I can move forward happily knowing that I can contribute to humanity and even more so as opportunities open and life progresses.
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<p>Go ahead and grade all aspects: grammar, syntax, etc.; don't be afraid to be harsh.</p>