<p>Hi guys! I decided I'd done enough MC preparation and I really need to get started on my essay prep, but instead of actually looking through tips I just decided to go with my gut and see how well I do on my first try, then learn from criticism. I'm pretty sure my examples were meh (especially by using Einstein! what was I thinking?) but I did do it within the time limit and I'm relatively satisfied with it. I would love it if some of you lovely people could grade me on the 2-12 scale or anything equivalent. </p>
<p>PROMPT:
Think carefully about the issue presented int eh following excerpt and the assignment below. </p>
<p>We almost always tend to treat people on the basis of what they have done: the star athlete is recognized and rewarded with a college scholarship, while the lawbreaker is prosecuted and punished. But our past deeds provide only a partial measure of our real worth as human beings. We should be treated according to what we are capable of accomplishing, regardless of what we may or may not have actually done. </p>
<p>ASSIGNMENT:
Should people be treated according to what they are capable of achieving instead of what they have actually done? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
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<p>ESSAY:
As a race, humans often misjudge each other based on financial, political and social terms; oftentimes in the process, true genius is disregarded and left behind due to the prejudices that society retains. People should be judged primarily on their inherent ability rather than their past achievements.</p>
<p>Albert Einstein, arguably the greatest scientist of this era, is an obvious example for this topic. As a child he showed no capacity for genius - on the contrary, he struggled from speech impediments and learning disorders from a very young age. His teachers disregarded him and no doubt regretted it as they saw who he would develop into. Einstein's genius is the foundation of physics as humanity knows it - and yet, where would society be had it just ignored him instead of embracing and nurturing his abilities? Oftentimes it is uncommon for intelligence to be seen immediately, and that is why people should be judged based on their inherent abilities. </p>
<p>Another prominent example is that of Wu Ze Tian, one of the most powerful women in Ancient Chinese history. As a woman from the countryside, she possessed nothing and theoretically should have led a life of poverty as was common for peasants in those days. Instead, she defied expectations - she became a concubine and through both hard work and deviousness she became the Emperor's Consort. Furthermore, within a few decades she had, in essence, ascended the throne; her reforms, though at times ruthless, were revolutionary and benefited China greatly, bringing a new age of prosperity to the people. To achieve so much should have been impossible for a rural farm girl. But like Einstein, Wu Ze Tian possessed the resolve and an inherent ability to achieve. If society does not embrace these people, society will simply cease to achieve. </p>
<p>Similarly is the character of Elizabeth Bennett from Pride and Prejudice by Jane Austen. Because of her low status, her family if often regarded by others as essentially trash and even her love interest, Mr. Darcy, is conflicted by her lineage. Although Elizabeth certainly isn't a genius, she possesses wit, beauty, and skill that contrasts with her birth, defying the expectations of those higher classes in the novel. It is she that ends up married to the wealthiest character of the book because of her inborn intelligence and likeability. Once again, society has expressed that people are weighted by their achievements rather than their ability, and once again society is proved incorrect by a prominent character. </p>
<p>To judge a person based upon the opportunities, either financial, political, or social that they have had is inherently wrong. Humanity as a whole must learn to embrace those born of lower status and allow for their abilities to develop so that these individuals can contribute to society in a positive manner as well. </p>
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<p>wow, i think it's gotten worse from the last time I read it. Please don't comment on the specificity of/the actual examples because I know I need to work on that. And I had a really quick question––by two pages being ideal, do you guys mean back and front (do I even have enough)? I've been getting 790 on my writing MCs, so the essay is imperative at this point. THIS IS AN ACTUAL SAT PROMPT.</p>
<p>Thank you so much! Have a wonderful day :')</p>