SAT essay

<p>Has anyone on these forums had an essay rescored and gotten a higher score back? I was considering doing it....but after searching the forum I couldn't find anyone posting on their score going up.</p>

<p>hey..could you look at my essay..I feel the same way but I am not sure.</p>

<p>Hey, I was also debating whether to send in my essay for rescoring. Its an expensive service, so I thought I'd hear your opinions first. This essay scored an "8." Do you think this score represents the essay quality, please give any reasons and ways to improve my score. Thanks.</p>

<p>Assignment: Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>I believe it is true that all important discoveries are the result of focusing on one subject. This may be observed through technological breakthroughs , as well as philosophical conclusions.</p>

<p>One type of discovery that is the result of strict focus is a technological breakthrough, One supporting historical example is the invention of the light bulb by Thomas Edison. Edison spent years experimenting with different pieces of filiment to illuminate the bulb, with little success. Only after years of focus -- and about a thousand trials -- Edison was able to make his idea work. Other technological advances came about in the same way; such as Bell’s telephone. Without the perseverance of the inventor, these inventions would not be around today.</p>

<p>Another type of discovery that is the result of strict focus is a philosophical conclusion. The great philosophers spent the majority of their lives perfecting their ideas and focusing on the task of understanding the human mind. One such philosopher was the French Descartes, who questioned the existence of his surroundings. This uncertainty led him to wonder if he himself existed. He was able to conclude: “I think, therefore I exist,” only after much study and thought. Aristotle, who believed in setting standard paragons for man-made objects; and Plato, who felt that nothing on Earth would ever be perfect, both spent their entire lives focusing on -- and perfecting-- their beliefs.</p>

<p>Technological discoveries and philosophical conclusions are two examples of the need for focus and perseverance in order to bring forth a new discovery. If one takes his work too lightly and without focus, he will not be able to observe all of the necessary facts that are vital in a successful discovery.</p>

<p>Also, the hand writing was a little sloppy. Could that have also affected my score? Thanks again for taking the time to read it!</p>

<p>yes. I think it deserved an 8-at MAX a 9. The reason for that is because you don't have well developed paragraphs. To score in the 10-12's you have to have well developed paragraphs that show outstanding skills because in this essay, it seems like you know how to write an essay, but not an outstanding one.</p>

<p>I thought his was alright... I dunno I made an 11 on my other one and an 8 on this one and honestly I thought they were pretty much the same quality. The thing for me is that I used a crappy eraser on this one and it didn't erase well enough so the things I had erased showed up on my scan resulting in a lot of words over words and random words where there should have been spaces. I'm not sure if there's anything I can do about this...I'll e-mail collegeboard and ask though I guess.</p>

<p>ccmbr, my scan showed some words that aren't supposed to be there too but I got a 12. I, personally, think this essay is a horrible representation of what I'm capable of but at the time I felt like I aced the prompt. Oh well, ignore the minor errors and such. After all, only written in 25 minutes.</p>

<p>Assignment: Are all important discoveries the result of focusing on one subject? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<pre><code>Discoveries through the course of human history has marked mankind’s ability to perceive the world. Yet, discoveries are simply events where the unknown is made known; it does not require a fundamental process to ensure a discovery. Discoveries, for the most part, are not sought out, but during the journey of another action a discovery, by chance, happens.

Isaac Newton, the father of physics in modern science, did not begin developing his theories and natural laws without having first encountered a catalyst for his research. Newton was a mathematician, he was not seeking to apply numbers to actions of matter and how it relates to physics. During his studies of math, Newton witnessed a natural occurrence– he saw an apple fall from a tree. Newton was not waiting for an apple to fall, nor was he expecting the event. He was merely studying, but this coincidental action sparked questions in Newton; he wished to know why the apple had fallen. Eventually, Newton ended up with a theory that became a natural law– he had made a discovery in physics that began with chance.

Discoveries that are sought out by explorers of a certain field may not be the ones to experience those discoveries. A perfect example is the question of how the Cretaceous extinction of the dinosaurs happened. For years, paleontologists searched for evidences but only came up with inconclusive hypotheses. Paleontologists did not discover the most conclusive evidence or hypothesis to the extinction that is most widely accepted in modern science. A geologist named Luis Alvarez was studying the chemical composition of the earth’s crust around the world to compare his data. But he found an interesting layer of iridium covering the entire earth that dates approximately to the extinction of the dinosaurs. This layer could only be uniformly created at the same time by comets or asteroids striking the earth. He combined the hypothesis with the observation of the Yucatan crater which exhibits an impact that would catastrophically raise the iridium levels. Paleontologists could not believe the validity and rejected the hypothesis for some time. What they were searching for was accidentally discovered by a geologist not researching the dinosaur extinction. The hypothesis was recognized as “The Alvarez Hypothesis” that we accept today as the correct theory.

Therefore, important discoveries do not happen by search in every case. Some of the most important discoveries were discovered by those absorbed by an entirely separate subject. Great discoveries also happen by chance.
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