Sat this week! Pls grade my essay!

Test Preparation
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<p>Q. Does the truth change depending on how people look at things?
Many great minds have pondered the very question of truth. Does truth change depending on the point of view? Although they have not reached a consensus, many seem to be in the opinion that there is only single absolute truth. However, after a careful study of the issue, one would be able to conclude that truth can change depending on one’s perception. Compelling examples such as The Bluest Eye by Toni Morrison and the Schrodinger’s cat experiment bolster my view.</p>

<p>If one looks at a fact in a particular way, that is the truth for that person even if It isn’t for another person. For example, in The Bluest Eye by Toni Morrison, Pecola has a fanatic belief that being white and having blue eyes will make her look beautiful. After a series of events, she turns insane and believe that she has blue eye, when in fact, she doesn’t. Because she believes that she has blue eyes, she thinks that she is beautiful and that becomes the ultimate truth for her even if others don’t think so. In this sense, one’s belief can distort the truth.</p>

<p>Likewise, there are aspects of life that have several truths depending on how people look at them. For example, in the Schrodinger’s cat experiment, the cat in the box is considered both dead and alive at the same time. Because the only way for people to find out whether the cat inside the box is dead or alive, the cat is both dead and alive until we open the box. During that time, if a person looks at the box saying the poison killed the cat, then the cat is dead. However, if another person objects by saying that the cat is alive, that is also true. In this sense, an absolute truth can be distorted.</p>

<p>Yes, there are irrefutable truths such as water is consisted of two oxygen molecules, but those irrefutable truths are infinitesimal compared to innumerable other ‘truths’ that a person believes and perceives. </p>

<p>Is it that truth is something absolute and impeccable? It is very tempting to answer in the affirmative, but at length, one can conclude that truth can change depending on one’s perceptions. Both my examples clearly demonstrate this view. In short, truth changes depending on how people look at things.</p>

<p>Please grade it and give suggestions!</p>

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<p>An 8, you didn’t take time to develop your essay and there’s virtually no analysis.</p>

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<p>I would grade it lower than an 8. It suffers from being repetitive and having very few substantive supports–I had the sense you didn’t quite understand the question. Never try to ‘pad’ your essay. Always go straight to your points, be concise, use plenty of supporting details, be as rigorous as possible Shrodinger’s cat was an interesting idea for an example though-- I would like to have seen more development there. There are also serious grammatical issues here that impede with meaning (are you a non-native English speaker)? </p>

<p>However, please bear in mind that you can get a very mediocre essay score and still score quite high in the Writing Section. I have had many students score only a 9 and yet get in the 700s in Writing. I’d encourage you to practice the whole test.</p>

<p>Also, have a couple of books/ideas in mind beforehand ready to be discussed for several different topics. That really helps. Good luck</p>