This essay is the one that you should grade because...

<p>...well I'm not sure why, but I'd really appreciate it if you could grade this =D. Even a number will be more than helpful. Thanks!</p>

<p>Prompt:

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Does the truth change depending on how people look at things?

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<p>Essay:

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Since I was a little boy, I was always told to tell the truth, and nothing but the truth. To this date, the idea of telling the "truth" has been convoluted and has never been clear as to what "truth" really is. As such, I strongly agree with the notion that the truth is different depending on the point of view. A historical example, a news article, and a personal experience, all corroborate this notion.</p>

<p>The American Revolution's series of events have been hotly debated throughout the years. The Boston "Massacre" is known to the United States as an act of terror committed on US soil, whereas the British view the "Massacre" as more of a necessary defensive act that had to be taken. Delving deeper into the issue, the US believes that the British were the ones that fired the first shot, whereas the British believe the antithesis of the argument - that the US was the one to initiate the attack. Clearly, by looking at the Boston Massacre from both points of view the questions still remains - who's telling the truth? The answer? It depends on what the perspective is.</p>

<p>Furthermore, the long-lasting issue of poverty in many third-world countries changes the people's viewpoint of how the world functions. In a recent New York Times article, 60 percent of the poverty-stricken people in isolated third-world countries did not believe that something as fantastical as a computer existed. As this study indicates, the point of view people hold is largely an indication of what they are exposed to.</p>

<p>Moreover, my personal experience at a Golden State Warriors basketball game takes a more literal stance towards the notion. The game I was at had a questionable call made by the referee of the game. As I saw it, the Warriors had fumbled and lost the ball to the Miami Heat. But as the referee saw it, he believed that the Miami Heats had touched the ball last, making it so that the Warriors now had posession of the ball. To me, it didn't seem that way, and although the referee had the final call, I still strongly believed in the truth that the Heats should have posession of the ball.</p>

<p>The example of the Boston Massacre, the New York Times study, and the basketball game all uphold the notion at hand.

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<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>Have a number!</p>

<p>5~</p>

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<li>work on your conclusion. It’s super short, and not very “ideological” </li>
<li>don’t do contractions (Revolution’s = revolution is); don’t ask, just do</li>
<li>Don’t say “I strongly agree with blab” just say “blab”. It’s more persuasive</li>
<li>Good sentence structures and rhetorical questions. Work on diction</li>
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<p>Hope that helps…? =D</p>

<p>Thanks for the input, that definitely helped =). Yeah, the conclusion was reallly rushed cause I had 15 seconds left when I finished the final body paragraph, so I scribbled something down for the conclusion >.>.</p>