SAT Writing: Can anyone mark my essay {Essay attached]

Some people believe that there is only one foolproof plan, perfect solution, or correct
interpretation. But nothing is ever that simple. For better or worse, for every so-called final answer there is another way of seeing things. There
is always a “however”.

Assignment: Is there always another explanation or another point of view? Plan
and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

I consider that there is always another way of seeing things. Whilst some may consider planning and solutions to be regimented - I believe that there are always more fluid approachs to embark on. I recall reading a fictional novel “Ark Angel”, which a character - Nikolai Drevin, a russian billionaire had envisaged a project to create a hotel in space. His plan fell through - and he lost tens of millions of dollars, now if he had not had his project insured, he would have undoubtedly not recuperated as much as he had done so.

Even I, have had a similar, yet less affluent experience in my own life. Many students at my previous high school have gone on to elite universities, successful business ventures and other high-achieving products. You would
argue that being in this situation would enable me to follow a similar foolproof plan. Get good grades, do strenuous extra curriculars activities and study at an elite institution ceteris paribus.
However I sought another way. I dropped out of high school and teach myself syllabus material and give the exams at a test centre. Many people scorned
me for going against “convention”, and having a vision - however I am still achieving good grades suggesting for better
that there can be another way of seeing things.

Another situation which corroborates my argument, is the situation regrading the U.S. citizen Richard Glossip, a U.S
citizen scheduled to be executed imminently. For government prosecutors, their job can surely involve,
“Catching the bad guys, and throwing the key away”, a quote from themselves entailing their job.
However this current event is particularly significant since the only evidence accusing Glossip, was the testimony
of the murderer who commited the crime, with Richard Glossip being accused of orchestrating the victim’s death.
Surely then that police and federal law enforcement must dissuade against such a casual approach and ignore
this foolproof plan and consider "however. Consider the situation at hand. Perhaps things are not always rosy and perfect and they can
be from the offset.

I recall in my younger years when doing a written project on civilisation in Ancient Egypt that an Egyptian analysed the approach of having
square wheels. Surely enough this method was adopted for centuries, had this Egyptian not have interpreted the Egypt’s plan to have square wheels - and put forward his suggestion that
wheels should be circular then for better or worse our transport system may not be as advanced as today, with all types of vehicles being constantly upgraded. It is this logical and rational
sense [I CANT READ THE WORD I WROTE HEAR] of thinking that deduces me to say that there is always alternative approach that people can take.

Anyone have an opinion

Wow college confidential really is dead.

Anyone has an opinion?*

Your essay is a 7.

@hardwork213

Thanks for the reply. Are you joking though? I thought the maximum was a 6.

Or do you mean 7/12.

8/12

@hardwork123 really. That is disappointing. Any ideas where I could improve. Would appreciate feedback.

Your conclusion was only one line.At least 3,maybe?
Your “Egypt” examples is weak.
It’s a 9/12 if you’re lucky.