<p>Its a good extemporaneous essay, but you should follow a couple guidelines to help you in any essay.
- Try NOT to start with your thesis so up front and direct; instead, start off vaguely and gradually work your way into the topic - it makes your essay seem much more mature.
Ex: “In today’s society, we often assume that a hero is a person who possesses extraordinary talent or ability, but this is only a common misconception. Ultimately we must realize that…”</p>
<p>2) Try your best to avoid all HP allusions at any cost. They are often difficult to properly incorporate into the prompt, and more importantly, they are FAR too overused. 17 year olds all around the country are reading HP and most likely using it in an SAT essay…put yourself in place of the reader. HP is not original nor impressive. </p>
<p>Honestly, it’s clear your essay skills need some work (don’t take offense), but I wouldn’t worry too much about it for the SAT. I would put this at anywhere from 8-10? idk…
If you really want to get better, start reading some previous SAT essays (<a href=“SAT - College Board - The New York Times”>SAT - College Board - The New York Times)
and look at how they connect their examples clearly to the thesis-this is applicable to any prompt. Also, it wouldn’t hurt to research some historical examples you believe might be flexible enough to provide support for various essays. </p>
<p>The SAT essay seems a lot like an impromptu speech (Speech and Debate), which involves a 3 minute prep period for a 4 minute speech on a totally random topic. I improved my impromptu skills by learning key phrases and allusions that I could manipulate depending on the topic.
My guess is, same strategy works for the SAT essay…</p>