Seeking some adult criticism

<p>(for once)</p>

<p>Hey parents! I was wondering if a couple of you would be willing to read an admissions essay of mine. I would like the opinion of an adult on it. Could I PM it to a few of you?</p>

<p>You can PM to me. Please include your email address, the prompt, and the school(s) where you want to use the essay.</p>

<p>Thanks a ton...I've PMed it to you :).</p>

<p>You never work hard enough! Your sister didn't act like this when she was in high school! And go get a haircut, you look like a bum. Do all high school boys have to wear baggy jeans? Either get a smaller size or at least get a belt that TIGHTENS! Stop playing videogames, you're rotting your mind!</p>

<p>(This is what the thread title was about, right?)</p>

<p>Yeah, I figured with a topic title like that, what parent could resist?</p>

<p>PM me. My kids think I'm the most critical person in the world. I'm sure my friends would, too--if I had any. (English teacher here--I'll be honest).</p>

<p>Sounds perfect! </p>

<p>Parents officially rule.</p>

<p>Well...not mine. Of course. ;).</p>

<p>I'll be happy to take a look at it also.</p>

<p>Super :).</p>

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<p>If you'd like another reader, PM it to me also.</p>

<p>The more the merrier, never too much of a good thing, etc. etc. Haha.</p>