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Prompt:ESSAY #2: In an essay of about 300 words, tell us more about your professional and intellectual aspirations and prior personal experiences relevant to your choice of a specific college or academic program at the University of Illinois. </p>
<p>Within the broad spectra that make up the engineering fields, my interest lies with aerospace engineering. More specifically, I aspire to work on designing and constructing space-bound/space-faring crafts. Despite not knowing whether I want to work in the private or public sector, I would like to work to make space travel more accessible and more efficient so that space is not just a realm of the select few but of the masses.
Designing and building machines has always been an interest of mine, for I enjoy both the challenging process and a successful end result. Having participated in several engineering projects, I have felt the sense of accomplishment at having completed such a task, such as when I worked in a team to complete a functioning robot for the FIRST competitions. This feeling was also brought about when I built a hovercraft during my junior year in high school. Aside from these engineering projects, I did several space-related research projects in school. The combination of these individual interests yielded in my interest in the field of aerospace engineering. I learned more about what the field and career involved, which only increased my interest for it. Later, at Governor’s School, I again chose to do a project having to do with lunar settlement, which led me to choose to pursue a career in aerospace engineering. This last project also showed me more completely that there was an increasing fascination with space, which led me to try to pursue a path which would allow more people to gain the humbling experience felt at present by only a few. In order to try and live up to my dreams and aspirations, I would like to receive my education at one of the best universities for aerospace engineering: the University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign.</p>