<p>this was the essay prompt
ESSAY PROMPT</p>
<p>Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment:</p>
<pre><code> Many people believe that being honest and honorable limits their options, their opportunities, their very ability to succeed. Unfortunately, in today's me-first culture, ethics may be the only thing people choose to live without! They believe they have only two choices: (1) to win by doing whatever it takes, even if it is wrong, or (2) to be ethical and therefore lose. Few people set out to be dishonest, but nobody wants to lose. Adapted from John C. Maxwell, There's No Such Thing as "Business" Ethics
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<p>ASSIGNMENT:
Does being ethical make it hard to be successful? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations. </p>
<p>This was my essay
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Note: it was definitely more readable on paper..it just somehow looks really messy after getting scanned</p>
<p>i got 1 wrong on the writing multiple choice but an 8 on the essay so i'd like to know what i did wrong
if you could please read my essay and tell me what i did wrong i can practice that and improve my score</p>
<p>I would’ve given you a 9, but here are your faults:
-You didn’t use any “good” vocabulary
-Your conclusion is very weak: You probably didn’t have time, but you should always make time to sum up your thoughts (at least 3/4 sentences long)
-Length matters: graders like to see you fill up the full 2 pages</p>
<p>Congrats on doing so well on the multiple choice; that’s great! I missed 5 on the multiple choice :[</p>
<p>i assumed from the college board book that they penalize you for using “good vocab” when not completely necessary and i thought they didn’t care about length
clearly i was wrong
thank you i will work on those things
note: i did run out of time
probably spent too much time planning, i suppose how much you write is more than what you write</p>
<p>extremely illegible</p>
<p>mine was much more legible though
the weird shading is because of the scan</p>
<p>Maybe you should work on your handwriting a bit (I need to do so too, lol :)). Even if it was properly scanned, you could do with making it just a -tad- neater. After all, you don’t want to get a lower grade just because of your handwriting.</p>
<p>yes that’s true
i can’t write neatly though because i need to fill up more space
however what i realized i can do is write in really big letters
bad handwriting is much easier to read when the letters are big
and that way i’ll also fill up more space =D
two birds with one stone</p>
<p>I have the opposite problem. My handwriting is very bold, but thin and tall - kind of stretched out. For example, the ‘g’ s on one paragraph will collide with the 'k’s on the one below it. :)</p>
<p>i’m also curious
what is the optimal amount of examples to use?</p>
<p>thank you
that was helpful
what do you mean by specific analysis though?</p>
