<p>So I've been writing my college essay, and, after showing it to a couple teachers I was told that the essay sounds too metaphorical and takes too long to get to the point to be effective. Add that to the fact that I read a bunch of online tips and tricks articles that say extended metaphors (which is kind of central to my essay) and terrible and cliche, and my confidence in my writing is kind of slipping a bit. Would anyone be willing to take a look at my essay and give me some feedback? I'm kinda scared that my essay is currently just a pile BS that sounds nice but has no real substance :( Thanks!</p>