This is my uc personal statement prompt 1.Help me fix. Thank you

<p>"Dad. " Finally , I call him father. This is the stepfather into our lives four years later ,I first time called him .</p>

<p>Since the day that i was born, I have never seen my biological father.Mother would not said for me,too.I was sad to think that my father left, I would never felt the fatherly love.But appearance of my stepfather, clean up doubt and worries of my heart.</p>

<p>In the summer vacation of sixth grade , stepfather came to my home from Los Angeles. At that time, I didn’t knew why do I have a stepfather, and why I have never seen my biological father.I though we can not became a family. I always think that I only have a father, even though we have never met, and he already left me and my mother.</p>

<p>I had dance talent since I was a child.When i was in the primary school,I began go to specialty dance class.But buy dance clothes, shoes,and training fees.Thus, each year more than a lot of other students spending. I have been told my mother I not continue to learn because I don’t want her work hard .Until later, I just knew my stepfather each month from Los Angeles send cost of living to my mother and me. At that moment, I really felt very happiness.</p>

<p>When I graduated from junior high school, I came to America of freedom country with my mother, I felt in love with it. Americans openness and enthusiasm inspired me deeply.My stepfather helped me to find the high school, settle down mother’s and my life. But since we come to the America , my stepfather and me just a little get together.He almost went out every night and went home very late. I repeatedly asked the reason. He always say joined in a party with his old friends.Otherwise, he say he worked overtime evening.</p>

<p>One late night, I wake up at night thirsty. When i turn on the lights , I saw stepfather sat on the sofa, his back full plaster. Mother peeled off the old plaster, put on a new one. I seem to feel like something.Mother tearfully said:”your stepfather be working hard to be created much better life by us. He went out for work every evening.” I could not hold my tears and keep my emotion inside, and called out:” dad.”Tears are welling in my eyes. Stepfather looked at me and said: “I have waited a long time for this day , I felt I’m happiness.”</p>

<p>Each piece of plaster on the body of father is my study motivation. I think I’m very lucky because
I have a selfless stepfather. Living with him for the past several years, I gradually truly felt he gave me many sincere love. Maybe, he always looked forward to I call him dad. His love touched me deeply. I will always obedient for him,and remember his goodness to me for the whole life. Maybe, he seems to became my biological father.</p>

<p>Your English is…broken. I think you need more in-depth help than someone can give you over the internet.</p>