Two new revised essays

<p>Just revised two of my essays, and I am curious as to how they would make a reader perceive me. I am looking for comments more on the emotional/visceral impact, not necessarily grammar, though that would be nice as well. Thanks!</p>

<p>i'll read em, pm me.</p>

<p>Thanks naderboy! Still need help. I really really need help cutting these behemoths down. Both essay sare between 750-1000 words! AGH!</p>

<p>I'll read your essays.</p>

<p>I can read your essays as well.</p>

<p>Gaffe i cannot send you the second essay because your mailbox is full. Thank you everyone. Please, id like more opinions if possible!</p>

<p>Im up to it if you need.</p>

<p>@Thegreyam: I have made some space; resend your second one.</p>

<p>Gaffe O had to break my second essay into two parts, so I sent you the first, and then when I went to send the second part, you once again had too many messages haha. Thanks though! Anybody else?</p>

<p>Yup... that's a problem of mine.</p>

<p>I have one space left for your essay. Send it before it fills up!</p>