UC application prompt 2 essay

<p>I am planning to address prompt 2 with a subject that really hit the heart and is relative to the application. In high school I worked my ass off, got amazing grades, did well in sports. I got into almost every school I applied to. Basically my life was perfect - I never felt any personal stress. In late April I had serious family problems, as well as a loved one getting very sick. I then had my mind in the wrong place and missed my SIR deadline. I've never felt so worthless in my life; I felt like I failed my family, and couldn't stand the fact that I just lost everything I worked hard for just like that. I was relentless but none of my appeals worked. In the end I went to a CC and then now I'm taking 27 units this fall. I plan on getting a 4.0, at worst a 3.82 and hope to get into Berkeley. With the spring semester and my AP units I'm going to transferring with junior standing. </p>

<p>Anyways I was wondering if writing about how this experience was important to me because I was able to put this event behind me and still stay motivated in school. I'll admit, I used to be a egotistical prick, but the whole experience was humbling and it actually made me hungrier than I've ever been before. I would say it relates to the person I am because it illuminates how I faced a big setback, but I still didn't choose to settle for less than what I felt I deserved, and as a result I decided to technically skip my sophomore year but taking a extremely hard course load and reapplying the next year.</p>

<p>Is this too much? I feel like college admission officers don't want to hear about college admissions in their essays at all. But I want to make the subject of this essay the coming of age and desire that I gained from the experience.</p>

<p>feedback please!</p>

<p>Hey, so I got your reply and I’d be glad to look over your essay. I can’ tell you much about the topic though because in my opinion, it doesn’t really matter what you talk about, it’s how you execute it. As long as you’re being genuine about what you are writing about and how it helped mold you as an individual, you should be fine. Feel free to notify me when you get the essay up so I can take a look :]</p>

<p>i’m gonna PM it to you. Thanks alot.</p>