UC ESSAY 1 The World I Come (good story)

<p>I wrote my essay 1 a while back but from the critique I got, I realize that it does not flow too well? Can anyone read this for me and help me some more?</p>

<p>Sure I will help you out.</p>

<p>I can take a look.</p>

<p>I’ll read it =]</p>

<p>i’ll read it, pm it over :D</p>

<p>sure i will read it</p>

<p>hey, i can read it =)
ive read tons of UC essays so i think i can really help yah out</p>