<p>Please provide some good feedback and analysis on my essay. I want to get it in as soon as possible but i want to make sure it covers good ground and gives some insight into who i am, where i came from, what i want to do and what inspires me to do it.</p>
<pre><code> Living close to Mexico is a reminder to me as to why my parents were working endless hours to keep my family under a roof in the USA. My parents decided they wanted to leave Mexico because they wanted deeply for us to succeed in the world and to live a better life. They told me that education was the key to success, but due to lack of knowledge and time they taught me what they knew; the virtue of the fruit of one’s labor and the use of ones dreams as a catalyst for hard-work.
My parents always do what is necessary. To avoid economic collapse, my mom began a business that brought her from caring for two children to caring for more than 13 children in a childcare center that she created in our house; it changed her from a school dropout into a certified administrator. My father went from being away for weeks to being away for months at a time in order to find adequate work. The idea of polarity aligns with the opposing experiences I’ve had in my life. In Mexico poverty is such a common sight that seeing dirty families living under old bridges and sheet metal houses, people eating left over scraps from street food vendors, and beggars asking for relief from illness are a normal part of society. Many of those people traveled in search of opportunity, but found themselves in a hole. In America, the first and greatest impression is a clean, uniform, society with opportunity for everyone. In Mexico it is hard to say you have a great life when one of your relatives was taken hostage for ransom by a gang, and police pull you over because they saw you had expensive looking car instead of because you were driving over the speed limit. My friend in Mexico who had dreamed with me about becoming doctors and had very good grades now works at welding metal in his backyard while I work in my room to complete this college application. Despite all these differences, one fact remains true. I was raised in dirt. Whether in the ranch in Mexico or in my own backyard in the USA, I always found myself indulging in the beauty and familiarity of nature. I am still marveled by plants and bugs and I also still find a fascination in throwing rocks and watching them travel through the air and hit the earth. I received a great sense of liberty when I was outside playing and I refused to let go of it for school or anything else. Eventually, hard work took a toll on my parents, during my freshman year my mother collapsed as she was stricken by her body’s violent reaction to overwhelming stress. As I watched her on her hospital bed I had a vision of reality. My parents, despite being uncertain and overwhelmed, were totally willing to sacrifice their health to make sure I had academic success. Meanwhile I was doing nothing to take advantage of this valuable chance in life. I can no longer ignore that I have a great chance to succeed compared to others and that I should be doing something to help others.
My love for nature has led me to pursue my interest in Biology and Physics. Knowing the dark reality of many other people, I have a sense of duty to create a permanent change in society to help them. My parents taught and exemplified hard work, and I have learned to work hard to accomplish my goals, no matter what they are. My mom always says “No matter where you go in life, never forget where you come from”, and I will never forget it.
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