<p>Can someone revise my essay and tell me what I need to improve on?
Thank you so much!
Here is the UCF Essay question:
How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?(250 words)</p>
<p>Here is my essay:</p>
<pre><code> Born in Leeds, England in 1997, I later moved to the United States in 2002. Growing up, Ive had a mix of both an English and Indian culture. Ive lived in a white society all of my life, but my parents still follow Hindu traditions and values, and they have taught them to my siblings and me. I have learned that I can still live my life in an American society, while still following Indian customs.
My parents both grew up in two totally different cities. My mother was born in Leeds, England, and even though her parents are Hindu, she still got a taste of what life was like outside of her home. My father was born in Gujarat, India, and his family had strict customs. But when my parents got married and had children, my siblings and I were given the best of both worlds. We had my mom coming in from one side with more of an English twist, with my dad showing us Indian customs, creating some cultural diversity for me. But they both worked together to give us a better life than what they had.
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