Very interesting essay, but not sure if it works (please help)

College Essays
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<p>Can anyone take a look at my common app essay and see if it "works".</p>

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<p>I can take a look at it if you'd like. Critique or just vague response, as you wish; pm it to me ;)</p>

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<p>I will take a look if you'd like.</p>

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<p>Sure pm it</p>

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<p>Sure I can take a look :)</p>

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<p>Very often, it's not the content, the idea of the essay that will make or break you; it's the expression :) good and compelling writing can make even a dingy bathroom look and smell great.</p>

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<p>And email me your essay :) Will read it for you.</p>