<p>I wrote about some personal traits of mine and how they carry over into a social environment. I feel, however, that I am missing the point of this essay... </p>
<p>What did you guys write?</p>
<p>I went in a similar direction as you did.
I thought that they had too many opportunities to hear about our intellectual side, with all the essays addressing more serious issues. So I saw it as an opportunity to relax a little, and talk about something lighter. </p>
<p>I wrote about some of my hopes for college life- emphasizing on how ‘people’ inspire me most. (which is kind of the whole point of the roommate experience, to interact and to exchange with someone radically different, someone out of your comfort zone) I also mentioned something about the instrument I play which is HUGE. (keeping it light) </p>
<p>Overall, I think the point is to talk about how interacting with people affects you, but keeping the theme consistent and focused would probably be a good idea. (For me the theme is being adventurous and being inspired by the roommate)</p>
<p>Ah, the deadline for EA just creeps nearer every day.</p>
<p>Yeah it gets closer and closer 
i feel your pain.</p>
<p>also what do you mean by “lighter”</p>
<p>For example I would avoid heavy passages on the importance of intellectual vitality. (what is that anyway)
I would narrate the letter on a very personal and intimate level. I try to keep the tone jocular cause I’m considered a funny person. (more or less)
As I see it, it could be Stanford’s way of asking your opinion and dreams on the college experience. Cause that’s what you would discuss and talk about with your roommate, right?</p>
<p>hahahahha I also highlighted my humor in my essay, I try to stay funny.</p>
<p>Nevertheless, what I thought of it was like what do you do on an average day, what are you dreams, what are your hobbies, where are you from, how would you describe yourself as a person.</p>
<p>I rambled in mine, so I plan on rewriting it.</p>
<p>Here are some quotes from my essay:</p>
<p>"…we are set for friendship as long as your musical preference is not intensive-guitar-smashing-rock."</p>
<p>“I am certainly not obsessed with making the room impeccable, but unless there is a certain level of orderliness, I will deviate from whatever work I might have in order to elevate the room to a humane status, usually with a bad temper.”</p>
<p>“From your happy (or potentially grumpy) roommate”</p>
<p>:D</p>
<p>“I am certainly not obsessed with making the room impeccable, but unless there is a certain level of orderliness, I will deviate from whatever work I might have in order to elevate the room to a humane status, usually with a bad temper.”</p>
<p>Checkin’ that verbosity.</p>
<p>^^
The sentence both graphically and syntatically displays “messiness.”</p>
<p>"The sentence both graphically and syntatically displays ‘messiness.’ "</p>
<p>I would disagree. Using the physical structure of a sentence/paragraph to imbue it with a particular property is great if it’s done right. I’m not seeing it here, though.</p>
<p>“Deviate” and “humane status” in particular. Strictly denotatively, they make sense. But they sound clunky and strange in context. </p>
<p>This is not to criticize you; rather, it’s simply to offer some guidance. Of course, your application is solely your own thing, and ultimately it is all entirely up to you.</p>
<p>Do you have suggestion(s) for words that can replace “deviate” and “humane status”?</p>
<p>Off the top of my head, elevate to restore, humane status to acceptable state.</p>
<p>Deviate is trickier without restructuring the words around it. It probably wouldn’t matter if you left it.</p>
<p>^^
Thank you for the suggestions. :D</p>
<p>Haha, I kept the language as simple as possible as if I was talking face to face to my future roommate. Tryin to keeeep it simple.</p>
<p>
Comes off as rather narrow-minded and judgmental. Some people do actually enjoy that music, and if they do, how is it fair for that to disqualify them from being your friend?</p>
<p>I wrote about a unique habit of mine, made it humorous and slightly philosophical, and then talked about some of my interests. I feel like the part where I talk about my interests is too weak though, so I need to change that. I love the beginning and end of it though.</p>
<p>@seekinguni
Hmm… I see your point, but the fact still remains true that I can’t stand such music. I guess if it comes to discrepancy in music preference, I can make deals with my roommate. I don’t think my view is particularly parochial; that’s like saying since someone is a devout Christian that doesn’t like other religions, s/he is “limited.” Sounds like slippery slope. Anyway, it is clear that my intent is a humorous one. Does anyone else think it is offensive?</p>
<p>I pretty much just talked about the stuff I like to do and the kind of person I am, the other supplements went more in depth and were a bit more serious but I used this one to show my funnier side :)</p>
<p>You need to set the analogy into the proper context.</p>
<p>It’s NOT like "saying since someone is a devout Christian that doesn’t like other religions, s/he is “limited”. Though you don’t have a valid statement there, either; that person is “limited”. </p>
<p>Anyway, a more accurate comparison would be this: “It’s like saying since someone is a devout Christian, he can’t be friends with anyone who has other religious beliefs or preferences.”</p>
<p>I wouldn’t say that the music judgment was quite so severe, but you’re the one who brought in the religion analogy.</p>
<p>^^
I just sent my application so I am not going to worry about it.
I do think your analogy is better.</p>