<p>Sent this in as a response for the prompt about writing a note for a future roommate. Thoughts?</p>
<p>Dear future roommate,</p>
<p>I feel like one thing you should know about the way I manage my general living space is that it is usually quite inhospitable to all other living things. This includes people and pets, but also the nasty things like bugs, rodents, and other pests, of which my domain shall be properly purified. That's not to say, however that the way I manage my general living space is a clean one.</p>
<p>I organize my room by throwing stuff in it, then memorizing where I threw it. There is no order, no system, no reason except my own lack of need for a system. My room shall become, inevitably, a maze of the clutter and collection whose navigation will be known only to me. Unless you, like I, give care to the utmost detail in where I place my things, you will be lost. It will have been you, not me, who added yourself to my personal pile of details, turned yourself into foreign matter in my universe. I will not have put you there, so I will not know where you are. You will be lost, and no living thing will find you.</p>
<p>Best of luck,
(my name here)</p>
<p>personally, i don’t like it. it makes it seem like living with you would be quite awkward</p>
<p>I agree. I am a nice person and would never say anything mean about anyone. But, I will comment on the contents of the essay. I am all for being honest but I think this was more of a creative exercise in expression rather than stating how truly messy and unorganized you are. You could have added a few of those things and stated them in a humorous way but turn it into a positive and show how witty you are. So many of the other short answer and essays were intellectually-based and thought-provoking so, in my opinion, this essay was a great opportunity to express yourself, but not in a way that would leave the admissions staff with any negative opinions of you. Just my thoughts since you asked.</p>
<p>honest opinion is that I don’t really like it. True, it’s good that your so honest about this but I think it’s too much negative light. Overall the tone is too dark and scary. The idea itself has a lot of potential to be twisted into a humorous and witty essay, but yeah…
still, good luck on admissions. This is just my thought on it and opinions differ from person to person (plus Stanford is upredictable)</p>
<p>I wish I could see humor in this essay, but it throws me off, especially in the beginning when you state:
Instead of sounding friendly, funny and hospitable, the essay appears to be ambiguous, philosophical and impersonal. That aside, maybe one reader will find your letter clever and see your potential as a future student. Best wishes for college admissions!</p>
<p>Oh well actually, I think I probably used up all of my cleverness and wittiness in the parts they probably didn’t expect it. I’m a little unwilling to post this as an example because I love it so much and would really rather keep it to myself, but here goes. For the profile question asking about society’s most significant challenge:</p>
<p>One could write several pages on a single issue like drug wars, hunger, disease, or global economic crises, yet one is expected to diminish those into 300 characters to get an education useful in solving them. If these 300 characters cant describe how that belittling is a problem, thats a problem.</p>
<p>As a side note, that was indeed 300 characters exactly.</p>
<p>haha I see what you did there. Kind of clever I guess, but it is very confusing at the first read. I read it probably 3-4 times before I understood what you were talking about. But yes, it makes sense. Good luck to you on your admissions. I just threw together a few sentences for that question lol</p>