<p>I feel really dumb now. Everyone is using all these phenomenal examples and I just used discipline turning into freedom in the metaphorical sense. I used music, academics, and sports and described freedom not literally, but much more poetically. I used Malcolm Gladwell’s Outsiders and the Harvard Business Review’s 10,000 hour claim forractoce - discipline leading to perfection - freedom. For sports, I focused on soccer, noting the free, unrestricted motions of the Brazilian national team (Pele), Maradona, and Messi. They all seem to fly around the pitch, unlike the untrained amateurs who appear to lumber ungracefully. In academics, freedom is much more intellectual, breaking away from inside the box thinking and accepted norms, and rather choosing to pursue one’s own dreams. I used Einstein and Chris Langan (drawn from Outliers), with an allusion to many famous painters (Picasso especially) who were all not necessarily appreciated in their own right, or even disrespected and looked down upon, yet by being able to work through it and continue to maintain discipine, all three are now looked highly upon. Moreover, that ladt point was very weak so I must continue, Chris Langan truly exhibits the paradigmatic traits of discipline eventually leading to freedom. He self-studied Russian and French for pleasure, along with pursuing mathematical concepts (reading Principia Mathematica at sixteen during the summer), despite growing up in rural Texas and having no real motivation. He scored perfectly on his SATs and attended a good university, rising from nothing to having everything. He has one of the highest IQs on the planet, yet his intelligence could never have been realized if he had put the effort in. Math in general supports this hypothesis, as one works more and more with the concepts, he/she is able to differ from traditional methods and begin exploring the vast unknown areas of math, coming up with no solutions and methods to old and new problems, freedom from discipline.</p>
<p>I got a 780 on writing last time, so if the readers don’t like it… Oh well.</p>
<p>Hoping my nonliteral interpretation didn’t screw me over though.</p>
<p>My first essay (11) I feel was written magnificently, don’t we all, but I “mispoke” and put geocentrism instead of heliocentrism twice, blaringly incorrect, especially after putting heliocentrism ghe first time. I got a 6 from one and a 5 from the other, I’m seriously thinking that may be why I got a 5, though mine was pretty drastic, as my whole point would have been incorrect in that paragraph. It doesn’t completely screw you (you can get a 800 with an 11), but it does play a role, albeit minimal.</p>
<p>How much will a bad intro hurt me? I was a little stuck in the beginning and said something stupid like, “discipline and freedom are an oxymoron. In reality discipline leads to a lack of freedom. This can be seen in history and literature.”</p>
<p>I said discipline, while essential to a functional society, can impede freedom, and that to achieve freedom, one must sometimes disobey.
My first example was the civil rights movement, where civil disobedience (essentially a “lack of discipline”) led to black people getting their freedom. </p>
<p>My second body paragraph I talked about existentialists like Sartre, Kierkegaard, and Dostoevsky. I also talked about Albert Camus’ essay “The Myth of Sisyphus”. I can’t really explain the whole idea of existentialism, but basically, the belief is that blindly following the rules and social norms of society (ie being disciplined) impedes our ability to truly be free.</p>
Oscar Wilde’s The Picture Of Dorian Gray. Then it was called immoral but he resisted saying that society was unable to face the immorality it possessed. Now it is great aesthetic piece of work.
How art critics’ criticism led Han Van Megereen to forge Vemeer’s. He would have done better not listening to critics and working to improve himself.
Ideas from Emersons Self Reliance including the quote “ne te quaesiveris extra”.</p>
<p>Fahrenheit 451
Steve Jobs
Khan Academy-Sal Khan</p>
<p>I have a good feeling about this essay, just want to tell Academic Hacker thanks in advance. When I get my 10 or higher, its all because of him. :)</p>
<p>Rosa Parks- did not “strictly” follow discrimination laws which initiated Civil Rights Movement
This Boy’s Life- Tobias forged his recommendation letters that allowed him admission into a private school, thus escaping from the wrath of Dwight and being free.
Brave New World- discipline and a highly “organized” society did not truly lead to happiness and liberty but relied on artificial selection and dictatorship to control the society.</p>