Which topic should I write about? Are these too personal?

<p>1) Teaching myself to play piano and guitar even though nobody thought I could. My piano was broken so I played without sound, since I couldn't afford another one. I couldn't afford a guitar either so I used my brother's toy paper guitar to practice chord patterns even though I couldn't hear myself. Eventually I saved up enough $$ and it turned out that I was able to play both pretty well. Taught me to never give up, not to let anything get in the way of achieving my dreams, and that I can do anything I set my mind to.</p>

<p>2) Growing up with a bipolar, alcoholic father. Seeing the struggle of losing control over your body and trying to resist temptation but unable to. Constant screams, breaking things, etc. Feeling of loss and confusion of who my father really was when sober. He had to leave the country when I was in 9th grade. It caused a lot struggles but it made me see how every decision has an impact, has made me responsible, mature, and independent.</p>

<p>3) Moving to several schools in 9th and 10th grade. (6+) Used to be really shy, made me more outgoing, less anxious, more independent, more open-minded, more intrigued in other diversity and made me see the best in every situation.</p>

<p>4) Taken away from my mom in 10th grade and placed in foster care with my siblings. Learned to overcome depression, the importance of family, and definitely became more mature and independent. I learned not to take anything for granted, and it showed me that everything happens for a reason and all will be okay in the end. I learned that if I can't avoid a situation, to make the best of it.</p>

<p>5) When I was put into foster care, I was enrolled in online school. I initially had straight As but the foster home didn't have internet so I ended up with all Fs for the semester. I spent 11th grade retaking the classes. It was very depressing but it definitely humbled me. It taught me to value my education, how much I really love learning for the sake of learning and not necessarily for grades. I saw my gpa go from below a 3.0 and being very off track to graduate to above a 3.8 and the top 5% of my class and realized that with hard work anything is possible. It also taught me a lot of time management and that you gain something out of every poor experience.</p>

<p>So now I'm stuck choosing one topic, since the common app states "an experience" as in one. Which one do you think I should write about? Or maybe these are too personal(2-5) and I shouldn't write about them? </p>

<p>These are all fantastic topics. I can’t tell you which one to write about, because they are yours and only you can decide which you feel will enhance you application the most. You may even be able to combine some. Perhaps you could even include a majority of them, with one as your main topic and the others as small anecdotes. #1 could easily fit into the context of another essay. </p>

<p>Also, look at the supplemental essays you have to write for the colleges you are applying to. Some of these may give you a chance to speak about some of these things. Best of luck!</p>

<p>A topic is only too personal when you do not feel comfortable writing about it. If you feel comfortable writing about any of the above topics, then I encourage you to do so. Appears to me that you have had far from an easy life growing up; the adcom does want to know that. I would probably stay away from prompt #5, as it seems like a way of using the personal essay to justify poor grades in your transcript. Other parts of your application are for that (and I do strongly believe that you should provide an explanation for the Fs) – the personal essay, however, is not a place for that. Prompts #1 and #3 are the safe choices. If you feel uncomfortable revealing family issues, then give these a shot. I would encourage you start an essay on all of the topics. Just write 5 sentences on each and see where they would take you (it really is worth putting in that extra time). You’ll be surprised by which comes out the best. Good luck!</p>

<p>I agree with others, completely your choice, but if you want an outsider’s opinion, I would go with 1 or 4. But I also think the previous commenter’s thought of trying to write out each and see which you think sounds best is great and could help you make the decision better. Good luck!</p>

<p>I really like number 1.
Maybe you could incorporate #4 & #5 into it as a casual mention of why you can’t afford lessons or the last time you saw your parents.</p>

<p>I agree with 1 as a great topic although all are good. Your accomplishments are admirable.</p>

<p>Thanks everyone! I really like all of your suggestions, so I was thinking of maybe using #1 as the essay where I discuss an extracurricular(that is an essay required on the common app, right?), #4 as personal statement with an anecdote from #2 as some background info, since they are related, and combining #3 and #5 as the “additional info” essay, with #5 as the focus. </p>

<p>How does that sound? All advice is welcome and appreciated!</p>

<p>It sounds like you have a really good handle on essay writing. All of your topics are poignant and also focused. Your writing style is clear and not boring or over the top. I think you can mention some of the bipolar/foster home/online school/moving stories within the guitar one. Through all of this, you taught yourself to play, you’ve made the best of things and kept moving in a positive direction! If I were an Adcom I’d actually like to see you play as well (doesn’t have to be perfect). Maybe a youtube link or art submission or something to supplement. Good luck!</p>

<p>Bump 10 char</p>

<p>@redpoodles‌ I really like your idea about weaving it all together, I’ll defintely try that. Thank you!</p>

<p>The first one sounds the most interesting and unique to me. I smiled just reading your little blurb about it. If you could turn that into a full essay, I think it would be really great, and I would love to read it!</p>

<p>Thanks everyone! First one it is!:)</p>

<p>what interesting experiences. i’d go with number 5, but they are all great material to work with. </p>

<p>@teastraw‌ Thank you! I’m definitely going to discuss #5 in the “Additional Information” section of the common app.</p>