<p>Youre still being way too general. You have to be much more specific than that.</p>
<p>Academically, I think it’s a good school, and that’s very important to me. Again, why? What academic aspect are you looking forward at Rutgers? Why is it so important to you?</p>
<p>I’m not wasting money on a college I don’t think I can benefit from. Uh, dont say that. Universities dont like students who attack other schools, because it shows a glimpse of your negative personality.</p>
<p>I want to go to New Brunswick
because it’s the main and largest campus. Why would you want to go to the largest campus? What are you looking forward to be doing at such environment?</p>
<p>I love how there are 5 campuses there. What does having 5 campuses have anything to do with your interest? Why does that make Rutgers so special? How would you interact in those 5 campuses? Be specific.</p>
<p>And the way of transportation is also nice - they provide buses. So do many other schools, so you cant use that as a reason.</p>
<p>I also love how they provide internships and make sure people who graduate are able to find jobs and whatnot. So do many many other schools.</p>
<p>So if I go there, I feel confident that Rutgers can bring me success. How? How would Rutgers benefit your education? What do YOU have to offer to Rutgers? And why should Rutgers choose you among thousands of other applicants?</p>
<p>They also have hundreds of clubs and activities and community service that I’d love to take part in. So do many other schools.</p>
<p>I love everything about it. Thats just simply not possible. If you want to state that, you have to literally list everything that Rutgers has, and describe in detail why you are so attracted to each aspect you listed. I dont think you can do that under 10,000 words.</p>
<p>Keep in mind that thousands of other applicants write their essays the way you did. You have to make your essay stand out. See, writing an essay is like creating a commercial for the audience to purchase your product. Imagine that the school youre applying to is the audience, and youll have to try to make your audience pick you by explaining what you can offer to the school. Writing an essay isnt all about telling how much you love the school; you cant sell your products by telling people how much you love your audience. Oh, and don’t use the word “love” too much, because it sounds as if you’re exaggerating even if you’re not. If you really do love something about Rutgers, you have to prove your claim.</p>