<p>“Overcorrection?”… it’s either correct or not. If it’s not, how can I re-phrase it?</p>
<p>“Trite. Cliche.” Not trite, maybe cliche, but it works just fine (for me that is).</p>
<p>“Having read this essay, I can’t swallow the notion that ‘adroit’ is actually in your day-to-day vocabulary. Even if I’m wrong, the sentence doesn’t make any sense; what does ‘it’ refer to?”
Well ‘adroit’ doesn’t have to be in my day-to-day vocab. to make sense now does it?
And come on, don’t tell me you didn’t understand the sentence when you read it.
“it” refers to being adroit at socializing, right? </p>
<p>Well yeah… come to think of it, “witty” does seem misplaced. Yes I’m a native speaker but I probably confused it with another words definition somehow</p>
<p>“Choppy. ‘Sort in relation’.” I noticed. (I used your single quotation marks ;D)</p>
<p>“I’m pretty sure that embarrassing something is generally pretty entertaining for the onlookers. “Surrounding audience” is redundant”
I wasn’t talking about “embarrassing something” which brings you mental pain but the “frowning and crying”. Read up. </p>
<p>“and a hopefully better society”. Well if you noticed, I mentioned Amman in my essay. </p>
<p>Thanks for your detailed criticizing but I think I proved you wrong for your comment: “stop using words you don’t understand” </p>
<p>Oh and honestly I did use the thesaurus for “imagine”, but I knew what “conjure up” means and it fits well in the sentence “wasn’t as socially-awkward as one might conjure up”. </p>
<p>And how can I vary my sentence length?</p>