<p>Like the title says. Anyone be willing to read it?</p>
<p>I’ll read it.</p>
<p>Sure. Would you mind posting your stats for context?</p>
<p>I’d be willing to read it and tell you my opinion. </p>
<p>i’ll read it </p>
<p>I’ll read it.</p>
<p>Sure, I’d love to</p>
<p>I can read it</p>
<p>I am heavily intrigued. I would love to read it. </p>
<p>I’d love to read it!</p>
<p>I would love to read it, it may be beneficial to read your other essays and look at your test scores for some context.</p>
<p>Hey, I’d love to read. If you sent me some background info like stats and extracurriculars, it might add some context?</p>
<p>Sure, I’ll read it
But one thing you should know: “risk essays” are prone to cliché, so I think that may be the reason</p>
<p>Thanks everybody! Wasn’t expecting this many responses lol.
GPA - 4.23 w, 3.99 uw
SAT - 2190 (one sitting)
Extracurriculars - 2 year varsity basketball, captain of JV(10th) and captain froshoph(9th),
- SRAP(summer internship at University of Wyoming)
- green club, chinese club, steering committee for 3 years
- over 1000+ church volunteering hours
- 1 year Sunrise Senior Living volunteering
- 20 hours Link crew leader (helping freshmen transition to high school</p>
<p>If you guys want to read my supplements, which are okay I think, I’ll be happy to PM that to you too.</p>
<p>@PKMG yea I felt that mine was a little cliche, but I couldn’t help it haha</p>
<p>I"ll read it! </p>
<p>Could you also send/post the prompt?</p>
<p>You obviously have great stats, and while your essay was well-written it didn’t really grab me. Granted, I’m just an anonymous person on the internet, but the folks in admissions will have gone over many thousands of essays by the time they get to yours, and will probably have less patience than your average internet dweller. So, to answer the question posed by the thread topic: possibly.</p>
<p>That will not help you. Nobody HERE is able to tell you why you did not get in. Move on … and keep your stuff from prying eyes. </p>
<p>@ xiggi Lol, I know it doesn’t matter anymore because acceptance to the Ivies is extremely low anyways. To be honest, the title was kind of a advertising tactic; this is one of my best essays and I just wanted feedback/reassurance on it.</p>
<p>The prompt - Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.</p>
<p>Firstly, I think your essay is fairly effective in terms of impact and is generally well-written. I also don’t consider it cliché, and originality is obviously a good thing. However, I don’t think your essay directly responds to the prompt because it doesn’t clarify what characteristic is central to your identity. Although I personally like how you described your experience of writing that essay, it doesn’t advertise you despite it taking up the majority of your essay. Overall, it shows imagination and intellect but it struggles to answer the prompt and advertise your identity. That would be my best critique of your essay but I happened to enjoy it lol.</p>