Would anyone be willing to read my Common App essay?

I’ve been drafting out my common app essay, and I drafted out a sample essay but I don’t know if it is something I should pursue or not. I was wondering if anyone would be willing to read it and give me feedback?
*I’d appreciate responses from adults with established posting histories please!

I’m a professional tutor. If you have trouble paying for help with your essays, I am more than willing to help you out with it for free as pro bono work. Send me a pm if you’re interested.

Just noticed that OP’s post is about 6 weeks old.