yet another grade my essay please

<p>Thanks in advance</p>

<p>Prompt:
We often hear that we can learn much about someone or something just by casual observation. We are not required to look beneath the surface or to question how something seems. In fact, we are urged to trust our impressions, often our first impressions, of how a person or a situation seems to be. Yet appearances can be misleading. What “seems” isn’t always what is.</p>

<p>Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>As the famous adage states "Never judge a book by its cover." There is no way to complete judge something just by mere appearance. One must get to intimately know the person or the items to properly understand them. Someone that seems inadaqute can be truely extrodiary and someone who seems to achieve god-like can have serious flaws. </p>

<p>As the earlier states, a person of unruly roots can be right for the most exalted position in America; someone like President Lincoln. President Lincoln was born in a rural background and did not attend school. Someone looking at his early childhood would say that he had as much a chance of becoming a president as pigs can fly. But what many would not have seen would be his constant hard work to stride in law and convincive and deplomatic way in which he spoke. If one would have talked, he or she would have learned of Lincoln's skill in dictation, but mere sight wouldn not have revealed that. </p>

<p>On the opposite end of the spectrum, even those who have fame and everything one could ask can be abstruce. For example, Benidict Arnold was one of the most well-known and embraced generals of the American Revolution; secondary to only Washington. He had gone into battle even when injured and led many unfavorable situation into victory. He had be a primary example of what America stands for during the revolution. Yet suddenly, he switched sides. For what? Money. He switched sides against a cause he risked his life a countless number of times. No matter how much one could have observed him, there was no way anyone could have predicted this result. </p>

<p>To conclude, the outside is only half of the personality. Many propably never expected the outcome in the lives of Lincoln and Arnold. Making a judgement on the looks and outside actions is just a hypothesis. Someitems are just too complex and to be able to know everything about it by just image is erronous.</p>

<p>hmmm. I would have to say anywhere from a 4-5/6.</p>

<p>I think if two people scored this essay you would get a 9/12 which is decent.</p>

<p>Examples were ROCK SOLID. The one about Abraham lincoln was great. But your vocabulary is what makes it a 5/6. You need to throw some crazy vocab to impress viewers to get that 6/6. </p>

<p>Keep up the good work.</p>

<p>I know, but when i see the 25 mins ticking, the words just don't come.</p>

<p>i disagree with chancesplease. you would get a 3-4, 5 with pity. You try to make it sound eloquent, but the mass of grammar and spelling errors just mess up the flow, what you should have done is flat out tell your examples in the intro. examples aren't that great- you try to make with what you have, but it just doesn't cut it for me.</p>

<p>due to the contradicting comment. I would like one more</p>

<p>5 or 6..good examples</p>

<p>Now that i'm re-reading it, i think it does have a lot of grammatical errors. I really should edit.</p>

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