<p>The intense emotion and dedication needed to pursue a passion is very difficult to adhere to in todays modern society. A passion is very critical because it provides opportunities for success, leadership, and dedication to a particular idea or area. My passion is medicine. The ability to have such great effect on another life is one of the most selfless goals that a person can aspire to. I was further inspired to become a doctor after my grandfather received his medical license at the age of sixty five and opened up the only childrens clinic in all of Dade county Florida. I would like to pursue a career in medicine so i can positively affect those around me just as my grandfather and father have done as doctors.
Thanks to my father, I had the rare opportunity to view rotator cuff surgery. I fully took advantage of the ability to observe a surgery because I felt it would further my desire to become a doctor. I also wanted to use the surgery as a means to determine if medicine is the practice that i wanted to pursue. Not only was I confirmed in my desire to be a doctor, I learned invaluable lessons that would stay with me the rest of my life and help me to succeed as a student, as a tennis player, and as a doctor. The calm and collected manner of the doctor and nurses baffled me; I had always thought that the whole surgical procedure would be a very hectic and intense process. The soft music and casual conversations completely contradicted my original idea of how a surgery was performed. I hope to one day master the art of casually being in control of another life and have the ability to work with a group of people in a naturally syncopated manner. After watching the doctor reattach the torn tendon i though about the tremendous diligence, focus, and care that is needed to be a successful doctor.
I aspire most to be a better person and to have a beneficial effect on other lives. One day I would like to follow in the footsteps of my father and grandfather and become a doctor thats prides himself in determination, focus, confidence, and outreach. I believe that the dedication needed to continue to aspiring to become a doctor helps me to discern important assignments from distractions. I hope to bring a unique perspective on life and society to college. The knowledge that I gained from observing a surgical procedure and understanding the hardships that can affect the human body will hopefully be a useful tool in college.</p>
<p>any criticism, anyone ?</p>
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