anyone want to critique my essay????????

[cJ1212]

<p>i just wrote it and its too long...can someone help me cut some of it out without losing its meaning?
thanks
-cj</p>

[MAStFROWW]

<p>i'll help you out , pm me</p>

[fooooreal]

<p>i'll try my best...pm me as well</p>

[abandy24]

<p>i'll read it, email it</p>