Anyone want to read my new and revised draft of the UC Personal statement?

College Essays
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<p>I am responding to the first prompt, which is...
UC Personal Statement Prompt: Describe the world you come from – for example, your family, community or school – and tell us how your world shaped your dreams and aspirations. </p>

<p>If you would like to read it..please tell me and I will PM it to you!!
Give me some solid critiques to improve my essay!!</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>yes, i'd love to, could you critique mine as well?</p>

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<p>sure! lets exchange :)</p>

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<p>I would like to read & critique your revised essay.</p>

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<p>Hi, I'd like to read yours as well. Maybe you could read mine too (for the second prompt)?</p>

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<p>Does anyone want to read mine to ?</p>

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<p>i'll read it.
will you read mine?</p>

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<p>Yes, I ll read yours, check your PM!!</p>

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<p>Hey if you want someone to read it, do not post in my thread, make your own please!</p>

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<p>i would like to read a personal statement</p>

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<p>I would love to read it!!</p>

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<p>I'd be happy to read it... if you’re worried about people stealing your essay feel free to email me at my school account... but I'd prefer a pm</p>

<p><a href="mailto:sxkamboj@ucdavis.edu">sxkamboj@ucdavis.edu</a></p>