Anyone want to read my personal statement essay for UC Applications??

College Essays
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<p>It is very personal, but I don't mind people reading about it anymore.
Please check for any spelling, grammar, punctuation, sentence struture errors, and
most importantly does it addresses the prompt and how effective did it respond to the prompt. </p>

<p>The UC Application Personal Statement prompt is...
Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>Please provide me some solid essay critiques of ways to improve it and what you think
about the essay as well.
Thanks..tell me if your interested in reading it and I will send it you through PM on here!</p>

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<p>I remember your name.
Send it over again? I'd love to see how you improved it from last time.
Restaurant right?</p>

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<p>PM it to me if you want an adult, college parent's perspective.</p>

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<p>Sure thing, I'd be glad to take a look and give some feedback. PM me :)</p>

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<p>hey i can help you but i'm a 09er. PM me</p>

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<p>sure i'll be glad to read it, and give u some feedback =)</p>

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<p>'09er, but I can help out!</p>

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<p>hey there.
i would like to see it too...i can give u my opinions back as well.</p>

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<p>PM me and i'll gladly take a look</p>

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<p>pm if you would like</p>

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<p>sure, i'll read it.</p>

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<p>sure - already finished mine so don't worry</p>

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<p>I can read it too.</p>

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<p>I can read it Pm me to it</p>

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<p>pm me, im an 09er though</p>

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<p>you can pm me.</p>

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<p>Sure, I’ll read it when I get a chance</p>

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<p>sure I'll read it. just shoot me a PM</p>

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<p>i'd like to take a look at it.</p>

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<p>i'd be glad to read them, sign me up ;)</p>