Anyone willing to read my Commonapp essay and short answer before I submit?

<p>HI! I'm an overseas citizen living in China. I want to start submitting already! Can anyone take a final look at my essays? I would like some feedback on the flow, content, what have you. Thanks :D</p>

<p>Oh! forgot to mention that the main essay is about how I adapted to my school’s different environment by looking at the evolution of my laughter. The short answer is about my volunteer work at a local primary school. Would really like some feedback. Is the humor/casual tone a maker or breaker?</p>

<p>Sure, I’ll read it if you’ll read mine. Email me at rob3spierre at gmail</p>

<p>I am a parent and I wanted to help my daughter on her essay. But, being an English major and editor-in-chief of her schools newspaper, she doesn’t like me reading hers. Anyway, if you want an adult (and not your parents or teachers) proofreading your essay, I will be glad to do that. BTW, what schools, majors are you going for and what are your grades/scores?</p>

<p>Pm me and I’ll read it</p>