<p>@alazee,
I thought about him but took a different direction in my argument.</p>
<p>Ahhh I’ve been stressing so much because EVERYONE used appeals except me on the Rhetorical Analysis Essay
But I connected 6 strategies back:
Paragraph I: Biblical Allusion (God created us all equal) and Direct Quote (From DOI calling Jefferson a hypocrite)
Paragraph II: Alliteration and Inversion
Paragraph III: Cacophonous Diction (Harsh-sounding words are parallel to the “harshness” of slavery) and Rogerian Argument (“Sir” showed respect)</p>
<p>Would these connections be enough for an 8-9? I’ve done 5 analysis essays throughout the year and have never gotten lower than an 8</p>
<p>When you say you’ve “never gotten lower than an 8”, is that according to ur teacher? cuz ur teacher could be totally off.</p>
<p>sh1t how bad is it if i referred to the Declaration of Independence as the Constituation? I feel like such an idiot</p>
<p>Yeah it is. But she uses the rubric and only gives between 10-15 kids 8s on essays and 1 a 9 out of roughly 150 students. Most students get roughly a 5 on any given essay. And we have to put a codename down so she eliminates bias. I’m just worried that not using appeals in an appeal-filled essay would hurt me.</p>
<p>Style Essay
lol…
¶1 - Pathos (tries to evoke empathy; connect his struggles with Jeffersons) and also mentioned the structure of the 1-sentence first paragraph
¶2 - Logos (if you believe in freedom, why do you let discrimination occur)
¶3 - Ethos (biblical allusion)</p>
<p>Last Essay
¶1 - Thomas Nast / Muckrakers
¶2 - An article from The Onion</p>
<p>My classmates said MC was easy. People here said MC was easy. I’m quite afraid how harsh the curve will be. And it is harsh enough already.</p>
<p>Last essay, the only one i really remember</p>
<p>I got a full 3 pages out of it</p>
<p>I wrote about Jon Stewart and Colbert, how Stewart straight up bashes Fox News and specifically that whole choir incident. Colbert, I noted how he takes the conservatism to the extreme and shows how dumb they are</p>
<p>I also got an entire page out of the south park muhammad fiasco, and how everyone is terrified of muslims and matt and trey held their guns but comedy central pussed out</p>
<p>i finally talked about comedians chris rock, dave chappelle, and george lopez, and how they take sensitive racial issues and exploit them. i also talked about bill maher and how he bashes religion nonstop, and even though this is a “christian nation”, everyone finds it hilarious and true</p>
<p>I don’t understand how you COULDN’T mention rhetorical appeals in your essay. That is a very large part of rhetorical strategy. All the other rhetorical things can be linked back to the appeals such as the biblical allusion, and the repetition of “sir” in order to establish ethos and a form of respect and credibility.</p>
<p>1 : I wrote an incredible intro, then thesis, then put in how schools must consider financial, academic merit (can it be abused/hacked), environmental, and long-term social effects. 6/7/8
2 : I had nothing. Intro, talked about tone, talked about structure, then allusion and flashback. BSed it. 4/5/6
3 : Was really running out of time, put something decent together. Colbert Report, Daily Show, compared how society restrains political leaders, then encourages humorist commentary. 5/6/7
MC : Probably 45 right, 5 wrong, 5 blank.</p>
<p>Can someone predict my score?</p>
<p>For my synthesis I pulled way too much from the sources, but I did bring in some info about how laptops are used by students at my school; they were issued to all freshmen and sophomores this year.</p>
<p>For my rhetorical analysis, I used the three rhetorical appeals (logos, ethos, pathos) also. I couldn’t find anything else to discuss in detail, but the appeals seemed really prevalent in the essay.</p>
<p>For my argument I used Stephen Colbert too, and The Onion 
My essay sucked, though.</p>
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<p>Lol me too! I thought it was pretty awesome to write an essay involving South Park.</p>
<p>for rhetorical analysis i used
- allusions to the Bible and Thomas Jefferson, himself
- paralepsis
- experience of his “brethren” in conjunction with loaded (emotional words)</p>
<p>for argument i used:
- a modest proposal
- i questioned why it had to be the place of a comedian to say such things, and wrote an argument in itself.
- i discussed the idea paralepsis and it’s application to the prompt.</p>
<p>Haha, now that we can discuss essays, I can talk about my mistake on the Literary Analysis. I read the prompt too fast (I know, I know, shame on me) and thought the letter was addressed to George Washington. I then had to go through my entire essay and replace George Washington with Thomas Jefferson squeezed in at the top.</p>
<p>My grader will probably want to kill me. <em>facepalm</em></p>
<p>1st essay, I wrote about how technology was a positive thing for schools to consider. I managed to discuss 5 of the sources. I used Empire High School as a positive role model. I also discussed the environmental impact of using textbooks rather than just having them in a single electronic source. </p>
<p>2nd essay, I barely remember, went better than I thought. </p>
<p>3rd essay, I discussed the Simpsons and how it has been heralded as a classic of American satire, but I then went on to discuss the ineffectiveness of satirist and humorist strategies and discussed how works such as The Crucible and 1984 were works that really said something to its audience. I said that sitcoms and satires will just let the audience laugh about societal problems rather than face the seriousness of it, such as the obesity and alcoholism demonstrated by Homer Simpson and Barney Gumble.</p>
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<li>wrote something about $, adapting to new methods, something about writing eligiblly. Used like 4 sources or something</li>
<li>i bsed it lol, wrote something about allusion and metaphors and analogy. I literally jsut rushed it. probably got like a 3.
3.wow everyone m ade a reference to the real world. I wrote something about rape is a natural process (yeah…) and if you say it in real life, you are going to be send to the counselling office or something. I think I am gonna get a huge facepalm too lol</li>
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<p>LMAO lemone…what???</p>
<p>lemone, your response to the 3rd prompt pretty much had me laughing out loud. …sorry XD</p>
<p>Yes I did write that. I don’tknow what I was thinking. I wrote that evolution doesn’t require one to love to consumate and reproduce. Sigh lol</p>
<p>Scor es</p>