<p>Can you guys tell me if this a good response to this Brown Supplement, please!</p>
<p>Tell us where you have lived - and for how long - since you were born; whether you’ve always lived in the same place, or perhaps in a variety of places. (100 word limit)</p>
<p>All Ive ever known is the mid-sized, gray colonial on F*** V*** Drive- the same foundation, the same front door, and the same people. Although the front door may now be maroon instead of white and the floors are lined with wood instead of carpet, twenty years from now I will walk up the front steps and still call it home.</p>
<p>It answers the question, and it seems to be within the word limits. Those are both always good signs! Haha It’s good! For a minute, I thought F*** V*** were swear words, then I realized you were just blocking out your address! Got a little nervous for a minute!</p>
<p>I agree with BrownParent - it’s a nice and eloquent response, but I have learned nothing about you from reading it. It doesn’t help the admissions committee in the slightest.</p>
<p>All Ive ever known is the mid-sized, gray colonial on F*** V*** Drive- the same driveway, the same front door, and the same people. Although the front door may now be maroon instead of white and the floors are lined with wood instead of carpet, twenty years from now the same familial values that I grew up around will still be embedded into the very foundation on which it was built.</p>
<p>You just used bigger words and more convoluted language to say pretty much the same thing. (And the first thing I thought was, boy, this kid is going to have a really rough time if his parents get divorced.)</p>
<p>I really don’t know what Brown is looking for with this question. I think it’s a bit unfair for students like you, who come from stable, suburban environments.</p>
<p>i agree with fireandrain… this question killed me! i, like you, have always grown up in the same place (a fairly nice suburban area). maybe go into more detail about the city you live in, how it is unique, and how living there has affected your upbringing. right now, knowing that you have wood floors and a maroon door doesn’t tell me about you at all.</p>
<p>I disagree with many of the criticisms above. Your answer is clear and well written; furthermore, it is brief (as it must be with the word limit), but not rushed, as you still get your point across. Your answer cleverly answers the supplement question by adding subtleties rather than saying outright, “I am not used to change.” It reflects that you are accustomed to living in one place, and that even an alteration so small as changing the color of the door, or the addition of hard-wood is significant to what has been to you a fairly consistent upbringing.</p>
<p>That being said, you changed one main thing from your first draft to your second, and that was your conclusion. It’s completely up to you as the author, but I think you may want to rethink how you end. You are effectively saying that you anticipate no change in the coming twenty years. If that is the message you wish to portray, then stick with it. But you may want to explain that you value consistency, and that is why you want your home to be the same, or head in a different direction. You can do this by saying that you welcome change, and elaborate in that final sentencing by how you might wish to implement some change when you return, even if that is just by switching the photos on the wall. </p>
<p>You are heading in the right direction, and best of luck!</p>
<p>When I visited Brown, they told me that for this section they literally wanted where you live. They don’t want a bunch of metaphors, etc. They just want to see if you’ve moved around a lot (since that impacts who you are) and what cities you lived/live in.</p>
<p>^never pass up an opportunity to tell the admissions committee more about you. OP’s answer does not do this. Although I’d rather read a literal 5 word response that tells me nothing than a long winded response that tells me nothing.</p>
<p>If the committee really just wanted a list they wouldn’t have provided you a free form space. They would have had it be a thing where you literally can only list the residence and duration of time spent there.</p>
<p>Are the maroon door and wood floors on a run down rental house in an abandoned city neighborhood? Or on a stately home in an elm tree lined suburban neighborhood? Or perhaps a farm house that your mom grew up in? Or a mini mansion in a sprawling new Silicon Valley gated community? It will always feel like home to you because it’s been a place of refuge and peace from your high pressured school/neighborhood/job? Or because its big rambling kitchen smells of curry and cinnamon and is where you’ve shared raucous meals with your huge extended family? Maybe it’s so average and ordinary and bland, living there you’ve been a splash of color on a blank canvas? You don’t have many words to use here, so choose them wisely. Every word needs to pack a punch and tell the reader something about you. Unless you give that maroon door and wood floor a context, it seems you should be choosing much more evocative details to share with us.</p>
<p>I think this is a bit unnecessary and convoluted. It also sounds like you can’t move away from home or are unnecessarily attached to it. The second one the metaphors get too mixed up in the actual description and I have no idea what you are saying. I would just say “I’ve lived x all my life” then have two or three sentences about basic impacts its had on you. Like "though it may not have exposed me to the world, this steadiness in my life allowed me to… something about EC’s. Or just put that in the essay on your EC’s, I think they like it if you tie things together. Don’t make it more complicated than it needs to be.</p>
<p>I would interpret the Brown question as not asking primarily about the house you have lived in, but the community. “For all of my life I have lived in Quiet Town, which is on the outskirts of Noisy City. This is a town that started out as a bedroom community, but since has become self-sufficient, and now even has its own Walmart! I have gone to school with the same classmates for twelve years, and most of them will never live outside the metropolitan Noisy City area. Etc.”</p>
It’s good! For a minute, I thought F*** V*** were swear words, then I realized you were just blocking out your address! Got a little nervous for a minute!</p>