Can anyone critique my essay for me?

<p>I wrote an essay about my passion for Harry Potter for my common application essay. Would anyone like to read it over? It's in a very early and rough stage and I would like to know if I'm headed in the right direction with it.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>I’ll read it.</p>

<p>me tooo :)</p>

<p>I love Harry Potter!!!So I’ll surely read!</p>

<p>I’ll read it - Just message it to me.</p>

<p>Can I critique it as well?</p>

<p>I’d love to read it! =)</p>

<p>i’ll review it</p>