Come steal my Harry Potter essay!

<p>Or not. In all seriousness, I need help editing the first-draft or "raw" form of my Common App's long essay. It's about how reading about Harry Potter's tenacity and diligence influenced me to wake up from apathy. Any takers? I need another pair of eyes to help me make the above point clearer. It also may need cutting, since it is a hair under 1,000 words. (P.S.: Don't bother offering to read if you are a 2011 HS grad or are otherwise not a senior member.)</p>

<p>This essay is MAGICAL!</p>

<p>I’d love to read it. I’m a huge Harry Potter fan and I graduated in 2010.</p>

<p>i made mine on a more serious topic, ill give it a look if you need help. length isn’t too important, style and efficacy are. pm me if you need help.</p>

<p>can I read?
i am applying next year</p>