Can anyone give me advice on my essay please?!

<p>The more I look at it the more worried I get that its more like some school assignment than a college app essay. So please anyone help me out! Does it really say anything about me or am I just unnecessarily second guessing myself?</p>

<p>Thankss</p>

<p>PM you essay and I'll tell you what I learn about you from it. Then you can figure out if that's what you intended to reveal.</p>

<p>I d like to read</p>

<p>Hey, I'd be glad to read it, too. PM me and I'll try and do what ElliottsMom will do. Second opinion, you know? :)</p>

<p>I am happy to read your essay.</p>

<p>i'd love to help</p>