Can anyone grade my essay?

<p>Hello everyone. I'm an international student practicing the writing section of the sat. Could anyone grade and maybe help to evaluate my essay? Thank you in advance.</p>

<p>Q: ,,Life without memory is not life at all, just as an intelligence without the possibility of expression is not really an intelligence. Our memory is our coherence, our reason, our feeling, even our action. Without it we are nothing.’’ </p>

<p>,,Many a man fails to become a thinker for the sole reason that his memory is too good.’’</p>

<p>Some people claim that memory is very important in life while others suggest that it just holds us back. I agree with thesis that memory plays crucial role in our life. This is mainly because it enrich our identity and also enhance our learning skills.</p>

<p>First of all memory builds our experience and creates our personality. As an example of that I could definitely mention the children’s growing-up process. It builds different experiences throughout their education life. They are being constantly influenced by the environment they live in. That is why we could surely admit that memory shape our personality. </p>

<p>In addition memory helps to learn faster and to get better grades and then better results in life. My friend Tom Is a perfect example of that. He went through a course enhancing memory and now he can memorize up to 200 things at once and gets only As from tests. Moreover he doesn’t need to spend hours on learning and instead he could led interesting social life. Thanks to his ability to memorize everything faster which gives him a chance to get into one of the best college in the country. By that he is very likely to achieve success in life.</p>

<p>Finally I can surely approve of opinion that memory is crucial in our life and that it gives us many benefits. It both creates our personality based on previous experiences and enhances our learning process.</p>

<p>3 because there are odd phrases (“children’s growing-up process”) and you repeated yourself in the intro paragraph. Your examples are non-academic. The biggest problem is I dont think you made solid contact with the question. </p>

<p>I think the prompt for this one was “Is memory as central as Bunuel believes, does it merely hold us back? write an essay, support your position.” Bunuel says “Life without memory is not life at all” and you respond that if Tom didnt take the memory course then he wouldnt be able to have a social life. That not what the question is about at all. They were talking about self realization, not Tom romancing gullible strumpets.</p>

<p>Ok, thanks for your reply. As I said before I’m an international student so I’m not very familiar with literature that students in USA read. I’ve already read in my country Macbeth or Romeo and Juliet for example but could anyone tell me where I can find those academic examples based on literature, history etc…? I’ve heard that sparknotes.com could be useful for literature but what about other websites? Which historic characters are a must to learn? Does it really affect my score when I use personal examples?</p>

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<p>There is no ‘list’ because this is stuff you are supposed to have learned in high school. </p>

<p>And there is no requirement that you use Western literature. The themes that CB asks about must have would up in literature covered in your country.</p>

<p>Your grammar is really bad. You could be at a strong 5/6 if it were better, but I think your essay is (3-4)/6</p>

<p>I’d wager a 2-3 for a total of (4-6). The length is too short, too many grammar mistakes, bad examples and literally no supporting evidence.</p>

<p>+1 to what argbargy said: You can even cook up your own ‘authentic’ examples if you write it good enough. Like:</p>

<p>As surmised by Luke Van Hoef,a behaviorologist from USC, studies have shown that approximately 80% of top achievers demonstrate exceptional memory. blah blah …</p>

<p>2 is totally incorrect. It is a 3-4 but I can’t decide which. I feel that it’s about a 7/12. If you actually read the sample essays of what a 2 is like, it’s like a down syndrome person wrote it (not to be offensive). He’s not that bad; his English is just not that great.</p>

<p>^johnb45</p>

<p>Guess my books have been giving me the wrong impression after all. However, I’ve read a few of my friends’ essays getting a 4-6, and his fits the bill perfectly. Guess it depends on the marker and your luck…</p>

<p>No way a 7 out of 12. Basic grammar errors and misunderstanding of English syntax and common usage would make it almost impossible to grade. Thinking 3 or 4 out of 12, at best. And yeah, not to be offensive, but it does sound like if it was a native English speaker and writer writing this, they must have a serious issue with learning. That would NO WAY be a 7 out of 12 in any realm of the imagination.</p>

<p>But you should go to the College Board website, and do a practice SAT. My son did one and they do grade the essay.</p>

<p>Thanks to all of you ;p Your advices are very helpful. I know that my writing isn’t as good as I want it to be right now but I’m persistently trying to improve it to be prepared for the SAT on 26th January. So I wrote another essay and I hope you guys will help me evaluate it and grade it.</p>

<p>Assignment: What is your opinion of Buck’s viewpoint that good people must always strive against evil?</p>

<p>Response:</p>

<p>Good people must always strive against evil. It is because they couldn’t let ill-willing people take control of them. It is also highly significant not to give evil humans to use our own inventions, ideas and knowledge to achieve their own goals and fame.</p>

<p>First of all, good people must not give malevolent ones a chance to control them and decide in their matters. Perfect example of that behavior is Indian spiritual leader, Mahatma Gandhi who showed extreme persistence in his attempts to combat british forces in order to get independence for for India. He had never give up which resulted in his assassination. But fortunately independence was obtained. Therefore he is a great example that proves that good people has to strive against evil.</p>

<p>Secondly, benevolent must not approve of behavior of ill-willing humans. As it is shown in a famous movie ,Social Network’’ which features a life of young genius, Mark Zuckerberg who had found well-known social website called facebook. He made it all on his own but as we can see in the movie he was being used by a group of evil people who just wanted to become famous and wealthy by applying Zuckerberg’s idea. It all ended up in court but what’s sure is that Mark has never given up his belief that facebook is effect only of his own work and determination. That example perfectly illustrates the need that good people must fight against evil.</p>

<p>All in all, is is definitely true and sure that combating evilness by good people is a need in today’s world. It could prevent them from ill-willing people who wants to seize control of those benevolent. It is also a great way to not let them achieve their own goals, and fame through our own efforts.</p>