Could somebody please grade my essay?

<p>I'm taking the November 2nd SAT, and I've got to say that the essay is the SAT topic that I have prepared for the least and I'm quite worried about it. I'm only getting around to working on the essay part now, and I was hoping somebody could let me know how I'm doing on the one that I've just done, and score it as well. Feel free to openly criticize it, I think honest feedback will really help. Thanks in advance (: </p>

<p>Topic: "Is memory central to our progress?"</p>

<p>Memory is central to the progress of living things because memory is a key part of remembering our past experiences, and living beings learn from past experiences. Several examples from literature and world history clearly illustrate that memory is necessary for humans to learn and grow.</p>

<p>During the first World War, several nations fought at a global level as a race to conquer more territories and gain more power. The war ended by the intervention of the United Sates, and many peace treaties were then formulated to check that imperialistic notions didn't rise again. Along with this, it was recognized that a peace keeping deliberative body would be required to maintain peace throughout the world. This led to the formation of the League of Nations, which was not a strong organization and could not act in accordance with its goal. Eventually, hostility between nations emerged again, and the differences in governance between capitalist and communist countries led to the second World War. This war ended by the releasing of two nuclear bombs on Japan by the United Sates, which led to major physical and economic destruction. Understanding the devastation that war could bring, the leaders of the winning nations formed another more sturdy, stable peace keeping organization called the United Nations Organization. This body is still functioning smoothly today, and proved to be useful when it prevented the Cold War between the United States and the USSR from turning into a full-fledged battle.</p>

<p>Just as the warring nations of the world learnt from their previous mistakes and past experiences to improve future conditions by forming the UNO, Victor Frankenstein from the book "Frankenstein" by Mary Shelley also portrays how memory can lead to progress. In the novel, Frankenstein ( a mad scientist ) creates a monster that kills his wife, Elizabeth Levenza, his younger brother, his younger sister, and his best friend. When the monster begs Frankenstein to create another monster as a companion for the existing one, Frankenstein refuses because he knows creating another one will only mean more terror and destruction.</p>

<p>As a careful analysis of the World Wars and "Frankenstein", I believe memory is indeed central to the progress of man-kind. Without memory, the world would constantly be remaking the mistakes of its past and people would never evolve. By using our power of memory, we as human beings can learn and progress infinitely to become the best version of our species that we can possibly be.</p>