Can anyone score my SAT essay?

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Hi, umm… I am currently doing SAT practice test and there is an essay writing section, but I can’t give a mark for myself so I am writing this here because I want someone to give the mark for my essay.

TOPIC:

Can knowledge be a burden rather than a benefit?

MY ESSAY:

Have you ever seen or met someone who is so genius so that he or she knows too much and her or his brain floods with knowledge? If so, would you say that those genius people are blessed, because they almost know everything?
If I have ever met anyone who is so genius, I would definitely say that those people with genius brains are blessed.

Knowledge can never be a burden. Knowing as many things as one can is a blessed part. People say everything should be moderate and adequate, because too much or too less is never a good thing.
However, the knowledge is a different part. Knowing and learning something excessively has never been a bad thing.
Even though one knows too much, that doesn’t harm that person.

knowledge is a power for every single part of our lives. There may be a few people who have exploding brains with knowledge, however, that isn’t a normal thing to be born with genius brains, so having a genius brain is the thing that everyone envies of. People with genius brain and excessive amount of knowledge in their brain should be thankful for having it because that is what most of people want to have but don’t.
In addition, knowledge can never be out of people’s control, because knowledge comes from humans. Not automatically it comes out of nowhere.

In my opinion, having a knowledge that everyone is eager for is a blessed and lucky part. So I strongly disagree with an idea that state that the knowledge is a burden rather than a benefit. Knowledge is a power in our society and there is nothing harmful or wrong about having an extreme power. Knowledge never harms anyone.

So, this is my essay till here and I will be really thankful if anyone can score my essay frankly. It is my only second attempt on writing an essay so please tell me if there is anything which should be improved or removed from an essay!
The total mark of essay in SAT is 6, so JUST SCORE MY ESSAY OUT OF 6, please.
Thanks in advance

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I can probably think of dozens of examples where knowing some piece of info can be extremely detrimental, but that is not the point here.

The point here is, whichever side you choose, you have to back it up with reasons why - that is the point of an argumentative essay. You appear to be just reiterating your point, without any supporting info. That will not only give you a low essay score, but might hamper you any time you have to explain why something works.

I suggest reading on how to construct a good argumentative essay, and reading examples of good SAT essays first.

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thank you for your advice and that’s true that I need to read some good examples of SAT essays. Thanks anyway.