<p>If anyone would be so kind as to score this practice essay (from CB practice test #1), it would be greatly appreciated! I have my own opinion, but he would like input from an outside source.</p>
<p>Thanks.</p>
<p>Prompt:
To change is to risk something, making us feel insecure. Not to change is a bigger risk, though we seldom feel that way. There is no choice but to change. People, however, cannot be motivated to change from the outside. All of our motivation comes from within.</p>
<p>What motivates people to change? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>"Motivation to change comes from within" causing us to "risk something" in order to make the change. What makes our desire to change stronger than our desire to "risk something"? This can be shown through the recent expample of the U.S. Government to pass a $700 billion stimulous plan. We see through this plan that it is necessary to change to avoid the bigger risk of standing still.</p>
<p>The decision of Congress to carry out the stimulous plan exemplifies the motives of people to change. In the face of a quickly falling stock market, the decision to accept or veto the proposal, required immediate action. The choice of Congress to pass the bill, demonstrates a "change" by the people in our government. Why did they decide to change? Their motives lie in the understanding that they have no choice but to change, because to not change would pose an even bigger risk. Although improvements to the bill, or even alternative plans, may have been superior to the bill that Congress passed, they needed to make this change because of the urgency of the dire situation. This example shows us that people change because it is a bigger risk not to change.</p>
<p>In modern U.S. society, we find ourselves pressured by the quickly moving world. Although decisions made by a normal person may not be as urgent and important as the decision Congress made, our need to change can nevertheless be paralleled by the example of the bill in Congress. We need to make decisions to change in order to keep up with a quickly changing world. Choosing not to change would often pose risks similar, yet obviously smaller, than the potential reprercussions faced by our legislative branch. We would find ourselves alienated by not keeping up with the rest of society, stuck in past trends and old customs, instead of staying along the changing ways of society. Even though we must risk to change, we do so anyway to avoid the bigger risk of not changing.</p>