Can I get somebody to grade my essay? Thanks.

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<p>Question: Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>

<pre><code>Conscience is a much more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power. The abolition movement of the 1800’s clearly demonstrates this concept.

In 1850, legislature was passed that made it more difficult for slaves to escape from the south. This fugitive slave law additionally had consequences for those who helped escaped slaves. Harriet Tubman was a prominent figure known for her efforts in the “Underground Railroad”, which was a system that helped escaped slaves reach safety. Tubman selflessly took action that endangered her life; not because of interests in money, fame, or power, but because of the compelling motivator this is conscience. Regardless of the risks she was taking, Tubman was able to go to the extreme due to the powerful motivator called conscience.

Two years later, in 1852, a woman named Harriet Beecher Stowe published Uncle Tom’s Cabin. This was powerful anti-slavery propaganda. This abolitionist novel helped bring to the light the truths and evils of slavery. Although it was a bestselling book, Stowe did not publish the novel for fame or money; it was published because her conscience pushed her to do so. She was aware of the wrongdoings of slavery, and so her conscience became her motivator to write such a book.

The liberator, a weekly Almanac was published by William Garrison to push for an end to slavery. Garrison called for an unconditional and immediate emancipation of all slaves. He would write this newsletter for 30 years not for the purpose of personal gain, but because of the fact that his primary and most powerful motivator was his conscience.

Our conscience is, indeed, a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power. The mid-1800’s abolitionist movement clearly depicts that people were compelled to sacrifice time, effort, and their lives not for selfish, personal gain, but instead because of the powerful motivator called our conscience.
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<p>Thank you again for reading my essay. Also, should I steer away from having all of my examples be from the same concept/idea/topic (all three of my examples were from the abolition movement)?</p>

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<p>I’m not experienced enough to give you a grade-sorry
I did like it though, sounds good. Maybe a little too words with the little stuff like: “it, did, was, were, for, she, he, are, is”. That’s just my suggestion, it will make it more mature.
It’s okay to use one topic for all the examples as long as you know what you’re talking about.</p>

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<p>I would expect this to get a 4 out of 6 (or an 8 to 9 out of 12 on an actual SAT). </p>

<p>Avoid writing about your examples in your intro paragraph. Your intro should just introduce the topic, indicate and explain your view, provide general reasoning for it, and maybe list (but not explain) your three examples that you will use to develop your point of view. </p>

<p>I would suggest using examples from different time periods, types of people, and regions because this gives the argument more credence.</p>

<p>Your examples need more explaining and emphasis. Body paragraphs should be longer than three sentences. Try 5 to 6. Body paragraphs should explain each example “clearly”. Where you write “He would write this newsletter for 30 years not for the purpose of personal gain”. Say something like He spent thirty years of his life and much of his wealth writing an unpopular but largely influential newspaper for the cause of racial equality and abolition. As one can see, Garrison cast aside his wealth, his public image, and any hope for power in order to follow his conscience.</p>

<p>Be careful to use vocab correctly. A six essay should use “accurate and apt vocabulary” according to the rubric. Legislature refers to a governing body, not a legislative act, and propaganda is dissemination of information for political strategy and has a <em>negative</em> connotation (which seems to contradict your argument that Beecher Stowe was motivated by her conscience instead of selfish reasons) </p>

<p>I think it is helpful to analyze the SAT rubric here: [SAT</a> Essay Scoring - How SAT Essays Are Scored](<a href=“The SAT – SAT Suite | College Board”>Understanding SAT Scores – SAT Suite | College Board).
Also, be sure to read the included sample essays and the reasoning for the grades they received. </p>

<p>I hope this helped. Good Luck!</p>