<p>I already submitted it, and my application is being reviewed so you can't steal it lol.</p>
<p>NYU is ranked as one of the top schools in the United States, it's not about what NYU can offer me, but what they CAN'T. I knew I wanted to go to NYU as soon I developed my passion for writing. At NYU i will be able to prosper exceptionally, and create a even better resume than I have now. NYU has connections that will help me create a name for myself in the world, it's more of an advantage because it is nestled in the heart of the city.If I were to be admitted to your school, I would take my academics very seriously because it is a second chance. It is a privilege, not a right to be accepted. It would be a sin to deprive myself of consideration at a school that can help me forge connections that will propel me to become the successful person I have been working so hard to be. It would be an honor to say I am successful because I graduated from this institution. I can offer NYU passion, determination and creativity. I have been writing since I was six, blogging since I was thirteen, and achieving my goals since I was sixteen. I was once chosen as a scholarship recipient for a Towson University writing workshop when I was fourteen, and I am currently now a Teen Media journalist at my local ABC 2, meaning I report stories that I write on their show Teen Perspective.I was the girl working on vectors on Photoshop, writing poems and reading photography books when I was twelve. I am independent, and all the opportunities I have gotten, I have got by being determined, and having a personality. I couldn't imagine anywhere else in the world, I rather be than at the NYU campus overlooking Washington Square Park.</p>
<p>You answer the question explicitly which is good
I like that you are referring to your impressive resume in the essay.
Good Luck…hope you get in</p>
This is not a good example of an essay to steal.</p>
<p>The first test of a “Why___” essay is: are the things u list about NYU are so generic that u could easily substitute the name of a dozen of other schools:
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It is obvious that u did not do your homework and did not identify a single specific attribute about NYU that only it offers. </p>
<p>Additionally, the essay is entirely about what the school can do for you, and you spend quite a lot of space preoccupied with what an honor it would be… Also, the “Why___” essay should not just be a rehash of the details of what’s already in your list of ECs/awards. You need to articulate HOW your special “something” will contribute to the dynamics of the school community. </p>
