Can Someone Please Grade My Essay?

Test Preparation SAT Preparation
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<p>Assignment: Do we need other people in order to better understand ourselves?</p>

<p>My response:</p>

<pre><code> Daily interaction with other people is vital to us to live a healthier life. People are there to help you discover and better understand who you are and where you stand in community as shown by Rosa Parks and Mother Teresa.

Rosa Parks’ rebellious nature against racism sprouted in a time where other people were scared to stand up for their rights. Parks who is said to be a very inspiring person for her civil rights movement lived in a life of racial discrimination where you skin color would determine where you stand in society. Many of the oppressed by racism were too afraid to stand up for their rights as human beings against authorities. Which is when Parks discovered her true self, a rebel who stood up for their rights. After refusing to give up her bus seat to a white man, she started a bus boycott ending the world of racial difference. Had someone else stood up for their rights, Parks wouldn't have found the urge within her to rebel against authority in return for their rights.

Mother Teresa acquired her loving and caring personality after observing the poverty that people around her were in. Initially she served as a teacher at the Loreto convent school, but as much as she enjoyed teaching, she was disturbed by the poverty that other people were in. She left the school to teach the poor and live with them to care for them. Mother Teresa believed that if she failed, she would've broken her faith. She started a school and soon cared for the starving and the Missionaries of Charity to support people with diseases like HIV and AIDS which also held orphanages, soup kitchens and many more. Had Mother Teresa not been surrounded by people experiencing poverty, she wouldn't have attempted to help the impoverished in living a healthier life than their harsh life.

Rosa Parks and Mother Teresa both better understood their nature by observing the way people lived around them. Without other people’s actions and state of living, Parks wouldn't have stood up for her rights and Mother Teresa wouldn't have made an effort to help stop poverty.
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<p><strong><em>I'm trying to prepare myself for the upcoming December SAT date if you have any tips to how I can improve my writing please tell me i would love to see it.</em></strong></p>

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<p>Honestly, 4 tops. So 8 in total.
Firstly, you have a lot of grammar errors.
Secondly, you dont answer the question properly. If you’re gonna say that People understand themselves better through interaction with others, prove that rosa parks understood more about herself, especially her resilience, through interacting with an inherently backward environment. Otherwise your response will sound forced, and it will seem like you used an irrelevant example because you don’t have the capability to answe the question.</p>

<p>Good luck - I got 11 for my essay - but don’t feel obliged to take my opinion.</p>

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<p>@shellbear Thank you for your comment! </p>

<p>It’s probably because English isn’t my mother tongue but I’m working on improving my knowledge in that. </p>

<p>Congrats on your score and thank you again!</p>

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<p>Your welcome. English is also my second language and I got 9 the first try, so I learnt it the hard way. You can definitely improve your writing skills by keeping in mind the question! Good luck!</p>